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A screed for marchmadness
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A screed for marchmadness |
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oceanvu2 Senior Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 1066Santa Monica, California, USA |
Imagining Norah and Bobby Sands: Bobby Sands, Bobby Sands, Who will pay for the funeral bands? You didn’t die at English hands, You starved yourself, you bugger. The men come round with fives and tens, And then they come around again. Is this to be my living then? And what of the child, you bugger? Our Ireland is still impressed Despite your self deluded best. Ah Patriot, go to hell and rest, While I earn my bread, you bugger.! This is a piece of imagination, not history. [This message has been edited by oceanvu2 (09-25-2007 02:03 AM).] |
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Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
Ya gotta change the language, Jim. I'll give you time to respond, but ya gotta change it. |
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oceanvu2 Senior Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 1066Santa Monica, California, USA |
Hi Brad -- I understand! Changed the language. I'm in PiP because there is a line and I have no agenda about crossing it. If I've still missed the point, please feel free to move or delete the poem. Best, Jim |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Thank you for the "screed" oceanvu2. Though it may not be "playing nice" it is pretty good and would certainly qualify as a poem as well. The only thing I would change is the word impressed. Maybe depressed would be better. Ida |
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oceanvu2 Senior Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 1066Santa Monica, California, USA |
Ida -- Thank you! Best, Jim  |
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