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Upheaval |
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FSU2010A New Member
since 2007-03-26
Posts 5 |
So who walks that line as it is cast? The same who pounds on the door Yelling which side you fight for Who pulls your strings, from just out of view As all the people squirm in delight Which of my patrons turns on me now? As I go to leave You’ll all have no choice but to listen to me now My ideas slip away You forced them to be held at bay Now, how holds the power As I tease away the sun You are all left to wonder, wander through a thick haze I now pull your strings, throw you down to the floor This is the side I’m fighting for |
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minus Member
since 2007-03-24
Posts 75 |
the first five lines are really incredible, and then their momentum wanes before the last two lines attempt to encapsulate...i understand what you are trying to do, but can not quite follow you through... |
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FSU2010A New Member
since 2007-03-26
Posts 5 |
Thanks I kinda had that feeling when i posted it. I have worked out a couple rewrites, so hopefully it gets better. Thanks again, this was the first time i have ever post any of my stuff and was kinda worried. |
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