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mable_sue Junior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 25Iowa |
Ssssshhhhh Bring corrupted wines, I say. Take silence like your drunken fifth round. Own a directed hush in hopes of intertwining sound to meaning. Drown in twilight leaving exasperating lectures at the realm of blues and purples. Engage with me. Align perfection to polished possibilities of tranquility. |
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The Napkin Writer Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 70 |
I found myself in silent thought of the superficials we pass to each other day to day when reading. Then I thought much deeper, personal! Somewhere in the realm of love, that we never seem able to look each other in the eyes, and speak truely of those loves, we have inside. So, silence becomes splended, over all untrue, and silence in itself, becomes golden at that very moment..... "Funny I thought before what makes silence so wonderful" Thank You |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Interesting imagery but it seems disjointed. I can vaguely see the more or less common thread of silence but I'm not sure I would have without the title. My own preference would be to bring it together a little tighter, give me more understanding of the relationship of the elements. JMHO, Pete |
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The Napkin Writer Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 70 |
To me, poetry is disjointed! To me, it is the most beautiful things happening inside of us, that has no clearity! To me, poetry only becomes clear to many, after, it has been cleaned up, punctuated, spell checked, and sometimes, entirely reworded! At this point, do it represent the truth of the authors soul, or an english term paper? Originally Yours, |
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mable_sue Junior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 25Iowa |
It is not silence I was going for here. It was calming the anger of a drunk emotionally abusive boyfriend.....I do agree as it is disjointed. And thank you for your input...much appreciated!!! Liz |
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