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Nurse Crachet
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since 1999-09-27
Posts 318
They know where I am!

0 posted 2000-02-25 07:56 PM


Afraid To Dive

Afraid to dive
into the depths
of my intensity
instead you casually
stroll
along the sandy coast
looking blindly
and haphazardly
for complexity.
You fail to notice me
caressing
your energetic desires
softly yet with intensity
each moment
a breath of fire.
It's now and always
my passions
rock your tide
until you see
the reining sunrise
with me by your side.

© Copyright 2000 Nurse Crachet - All Rights Reserved
Songbird
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since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184
Missouri
1 posted 2000-02-25 08:41 PM


Oooh, this is so beautiful, love the feel of it!
Beverly
Member
since 2000-02-19
Posts 123
New Mexico
2 posted 2000-02-25 08:53 PM


This is so well written.  Even thought the message is "hey, notice me", you keep it in a positive manner.  Great work.  Keep posting!
Little_Spyro
Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659
San Diego, CA, USA
3 posted 2000-02-26 12:03 PM


I agree! Beautiful work!
I especially like the part where you mentioned a breath of fire...kinda reminds me of--well, me!  
Keep up the great work!  

Little Spyro T. Dragon

Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley
4 posted 2000-02-26 06:34 AM


Beautiful imagery! I like this a lot.
Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

5 posted 2000-02-27 08:18 PM


Me too! This is another excellent piece of writing, Nursie!!  

Denise

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