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Moon Dust
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0 posted 2000-09-10 07:10 AM


First lamb sees blossoms,
To warm sea breezes and fall,
Felt the bitter cold.


What I write and others read is your own experiance and perceptions.

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1 posted 2000-09-10 02:20 PM


Maria~
This certainly met the challenge well.
I LOVED the 'first lamb' reference.
VERY NICE !
~*Marge*~


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2 posted 2000-09-10 03:43 PM


Excellent, Maria. So much in so little. Loved how you take the blossoms and look back to the other three seasons. A hard job made to read beautiful, with the stroke of your poetic pen. Love, Marcy
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3 posted 2000-09-10 07:06 PM


Marge & Marcy thankyou for reading and sharing your thoughts

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4 posted 2000-09-14 11:27 AM


like marge, i liked the first lamb reference too...in addition,the last line caught my attention..made me wonder what happened to the lamb in the end

thank you for responding

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5 posted 2000-09-14 01:16 PM


Kaile - thanks

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A carbon copy of my heart,
As well as my soul.

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