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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
He sat there in the trench so dark The bloody day had been so long The cannons roar had left its mark No longer his…… a happy song His back against the muddy wall And drawing on his cigarette His memory flew back to the fall Her sweet sad smile he’d not forget She was such a pretty thing She made him cry she made him laugh When she spoke it made him sing But now was just a photograph He wiped the tears that smudged the face With his khaki covered arm This was such a stinking place How he wished for autumn’s calm Her eyes were like the twinkling stars Her hair was golden as the sun Her scent was like the crystal spas’ He lent against his smoking gun …………………………………………… She was sitting on her bed His letter clutching in her hand ‘When I return we’ll wed’ he’d said How she wished for that gold band He was handsome tall and slim A boy to make his parents proud Her eyes they always followed him His voice was booming clear and loud Her parents were successful rich They thought him common below her mark But love could cover every stitch She always met him...... after dark The autumn past had been such bliss Strolling ………..rolling on the hill Electric storms …..their first small kiss And now their future’s dreams would fill …………………………………………… ‘Come on lads lets make them pay’ The sergeant’s voice rasped through the air ‘This will be our victory day’ A hundred men were charging there He stood up and a blinding flash From hells foul door had left it’s mark His tears replaced with a fatal gash Left him still in the muddy.... dark …………………………………………….. She secreted the letter back in the draw Underneath her scented gown Tonight she would just read once more While lying on her eiderdown But as she left her private place A shiver ran along her spine She could not see her lovers face She could not feel their hands entwine She did not know this feeling here She could not hear the answer ….why But now there was foreboding…. fear And a single tear crept from her eye Jon Mewett Sorry this is kinda long...j [This message has been edited by Jon Mewett (edited 08-15-2000).] |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Jon, This is a multi-perspective masterpiece telling of anticipations and unrequited love. Excellent! Dennis :^) |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Jon; A wonderful tale of love found and lost in tragedy. You are a master story teller and poet! Ellie Summers haunting melody that awakens the butterflies, calling them to join the dance in their silent song of praise to God. eL |
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Lady Lost Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 470 |
Once again, Jon, you have blown me away with your writing. My heart was racing with excitement to find out what happened in the end. You really are an awesome writer...this one was caffeine for my soul . ...beth You can never have too much fiction; reality can be such a bore |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Jon, I love reading your stories/poems. This one is exceptional! There is usually a second message entwined, but your title gives the insight to this one. Really enjoyed. Marcy |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Enjoyed the read. |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
THANX EVERYBODY......I must admit narrative verse is one of my fave forms....you can weave and pull the reader along...and make the thing work on different levels...glad you enjoy  Jon |
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BSC
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Jon, You certainly pulled me along with this. What a wonderful tale you have told and how well you have told it. Bonnie |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Thanx Bonnie I appreciate your kind response......Kinda makes you feel((((warm))) Jon |
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