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The Seagull And The Rabbit or A Tale of Freindship
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
The seagull perched upon the cliff The rabbit by his side ‘I could on the wind just drift And on the foaming ride’ The rabbit looked adoringly Upon this great grey bird He just sat there boringly And swallowed every word ‘You see dear rabbit listen hard I am a graceful thing And for me it isn’t hard To stop my squawk and sing’ The rabbit he just sat there still His ears flopped down his neck And if he tried to answer back He’d receive a spiteful peck And then a day in April dawned The wind was blowing hard The seagull riding thermals yawned Being clever to his pard And then a squall brought the seagull down And span him to the beach A broken wing a bleeding crown Just flapping out of reach The rabbit looked on horrified ‘Cuase he liked him just the same If he didn’t dash he would have died He looked so sad and lame The rabbit set a blinding pace To his friend the Cormorants lair Explained to him the seagulls grace And his magic in the air The Cormorant liked the rabbit much He was so sleek and fast He couldn’t refuse to help his friend So the bird was saved at last A seagull perched upon a cliff With a rabbit in the sun ‘I know I fly so gracefully But what’s it like to run? Jon Mewett |
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allan Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620On the road |
At the end of this the hairs on the back of my neck rose and I got a shiver down my spine - I loved it, especially the last line. Beautifully written Jon. A very lovely fable created by you here.  [This message has been edited by allan (edited 08-08-2000).] |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
Wow, Jon!! Beautiful job!  I don't think I could've written a better story.  Excellent poem, as usual! Little Spyro T. Dragon Watching the poets Passions' guardian dragon Moves with the rhymes' flow. |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Jon; This is superbly written fable! Wow! What a read! I love it. ellie Summers haunting melody that awakens the butterflies, calling them to join the dance in their silent song of praise to God. eL |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JonMewett~ This is such a delightful tale. A perfect telling for the young. How wonderful. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
Wonderfully written fable Jon!!! Bravo!!! |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
fantastic story! well done! ~Dawn whatcha doing in this darkness baby when you know love will set you free? will you stay in the sea forever Drowning there for all eternity? ~Live |
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Wobbly Head Bob Member
since 2000-05-15
Posts 299Virginia, USA |
Dammit Jon! If only I could write something as good as that! Your talent is way beyond anything I've seen thus far, your style is my favorite..but you piss me off bein' so damn good! *lol* Great one! |
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Jon - Incredible!!! Loved it from beginning to end, what a wonderful story to read to a child. Just great. Bonnie |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
jon..i must be honest...i skipped over this one a couple times, intending to read it "next"--the title just wasnt catching me...but jeez, jon...once you caught me, i was really caught up in there...!! i love this!! and i got that tingle thing going up my spine in the last 2 lines too..... absolutely wonderful writing jon..just too wonderful... LOL dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
I think with a little tweaking you have a fantastic childrens story here!!!! Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Thanx everybody yeah I like to sometimes write sorta nursery rhyme type things but with an underlying serious point. Thanx Wobbles your comments are most generous especialy in the auspicious company I keep including your kind self. Thanx a million JON |
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