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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon 
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Her Crimson Gown Time stood still for just an instant When she gracefully entered the room. His eyes met hers in faint recognition Though he could not remember where from. The band was playing some old song From the 30's or 40's perhaps. The dance floor was so crowded, With winsome lasses, genteel chaps. He watched her every fluid move From her entrance, then floating to the bar. He'd never seen such a lovely vision Her beauty was not even slightly marred. She caught sight of him from a distance Kept him in the corner of her eye. She noticed him watching, undressing her, Taking in his tails, tophat, and tie. She ordered her favorite champagne, And turned to meet his melting gaze. His ice blue eyes were piercing. Hers returning in a soft green haze. "Would you care to dance Mi'Lady?" He asked with deep baritone voice. "I'd love to M'Lord", she sultrily replied. Thinking "My pocketbook leaves no choice." They moved slowly to the dance floor, The band crooning out a slow love song. Their bodies moving in perfect rhythm. Feeling so right, being so terribly wrong. He was healthy, wealthy, and sooo married. She was a creature of the night. He was just out for a good night of play. She was sustaining her life. After the bar closed and everyone had gone, They spent a few hours of leisurely time. Having their fill of sin and desire. He paid her as he heard the 3 am chime. He walked her to the hotel lobby, To see her out onto the street. "Goodbye my dear", he said gently, But her eyes he could not meet. She sadly turned and walked away. T'was fantasy that he might care. A single tear ran down porcelain cheek. Her soul felt so naked and bare. On she walked and she saw that gaze again, From others whose eyes travelled up and down. Her soft green eyes said "Come hither". And again she shed her crimson gown. By Wild Child 6/6/00 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
well told story..beautifully written! dg "A Poet's life is on written page; a scenario to take the stage--watch..." dgvarner |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Well done, Shawna! Captivating tale from beginning to end! Denise |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
In a way sad.but lighthearted as well. I Like it. Jon |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
Very well written. The things done to survive......the things desired by the heart. Beautiful and sad. |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
WC; Superb job penning the scene. Your poem written beautifully. I hope MiLady finds a real gentleman soon, (maybe a part 2). Very good read. marcy |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
dg..thank you for reading. denise..I'm glad you found it so. Your praise means much. Jon... I'm glad you liked it. I didn't want it to be too sad. Childomine...The things done to survive are sometimes so painful. Thank you for reading. Alle'cram...I'm glad you enjoyed it...a sequel? I hadn't thought of but....maybe hmmm.. Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
This poem is awesome, I loved the way you wrote it, had me interested all the way through.  |
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Death of Valor Junior Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 20New Orleans |
Very interesting poem. It shows a little of the woman's heart, and how she yearns for something a little more than what she's doing. I like how you make her emotions so apparent, while not stating them boldly. Nice. Kill me later - I deserve it - but for now just smile. |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
wow.. what amazing scenes.. it IS sad, almost brings the emotion 'pity', for m'lady, as she wants so much to be loved, that past mistakes are forgiven, and tried once again.. very beautiful though, and a thorougly enjoyable read. Lynne |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
WildChild....what a great story and how extremely well written ! |
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