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blackhalo Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 467Denver, CO |
Escape Thoughts eluding my mind Shrouding me with darkness And falling upon all things good Crazing the mind, body, and soul Sometimes, I need to escape Hide from my real life And find things UNreal My PERSONAL vacation No school, no work No one staring down my back Except the wind and the sun All that really matter A wave or two All it takes To stop thinking Of all the things I have to do Escape Dive in Live life Let time tell This one isn't very good, but I'm hoping it will be the begining of new works! Have a great day, and if at all possible, spend it all here in the forums! Life defines no more than what it is you ask for. April 20, 2000 Alicia A. Renzelman |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
The thoughts in this piece are wonderful. We all need an escape from time to time and I generally get that in my writing or in reading. I think with a few nips and tucks this piece would be excellent. Keep writing!  |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Oh, geez.. that would be so great to do that.. just get away from EVERYTHING... no worries, nothing to think about.. no.. ANYTHING.. mmm.. I dream of that Alicia.. I do dream of that. ^_^ Well, maybe.. there is some place.. some state of mind.. hope u find it.. hey, it is good though! I think it is almost perfect.. well written.. and those are exactly my thoughts.. mmm.. that would be REALLY nice.. lol. Lynne |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I enjoyed this one. The second stanza is my favorite. I feel that way sometimes.Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau" |
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