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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg 
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Going up, with squinted eyes Leaving souls, with hearts of light Away from Earth, into the skies So fast they step, their human right So fast they step, as though in flight Seeking, somehow, stairs of glass Taking, somewhere, steps that fail Always feeling steel or brass Instead, I eye their cautious trail Reaping vict'ry, sowing love Climbing on my hands and eyes Always kept low, not above Simple steps upon a rise Every step falls short, and dies |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
This is so well done. I've tried it, I know how hard it is. Good work. Joyce |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
This is outstanding! I enjoyed it very much. Betty Lou Hebert |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Wonderfully written! But I'm having a little trouble understanding the meaning, a bit tired today too. Could you give an explanation of what the analogy is? Just for the slow on the uptake, like me...Ellie A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Allan you've done a wonderful acrostic! I read this a couple times, and I too am having trouble grasping just what it is you're speaking of. You're imagery is wonderful, and the steel and brass, gives me the feel of either strength or coldness. Am I even close here? <*\\\>< |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This would be something of a story. The acrostic is from the perspective of a skeptical person, living on the outside of people whose faiths require them to believe things that cannot be seen, or touched. A glass stairway would be the faith he seeks, the path he wants. A path that cannot be seen (glass, get it?  ) He tries to achieve this with his hands and eyes, believing it for what he sees and what he touches, but he simply cannot do that, because he lacks whatever special ingredient or sense the others have that lets them believe, and walk on the path.Steel and brass are substitutes, other things, other beliefs, that can be seen with the eye. That's what I was saying there... A lengthy explanation... but I do hope it helped. Thank you all for your replies and praise. I did enjoy writing this one, I think it turned out nicely. ~Allan Its rather handy being at the top of the food chain...you can sort things out and not get the blame for it. ~~Elizabeth Johnson (anonymousfemale) [This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 03-30-2001).] |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
"Reaping vict'ry, sowing love Climbing on my hands and eyes Always kept low, not above" I really liked this Allan. Very good form and imagery. I agree it turned out nicely. Thanks.  "The poet is the priest of the invisible." |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Actually Allan that's genius! I very much like what you've described! It's very logical now that I understand. It allows to me view things from a different perspective. Thank you for taking the time to explain it. *I won't go into much here but...*It's not necessarily lacking what others have, to be able to see something not visible, everyone has it. It is a matter of how we perceive those things. It's the affect those 'unseen' things have. For instance the wind, we cannot see the wind, but we know it's there, not because we can see it, but because we see (feel) the 'affects' of it. I enjoyed this poem immensely, and the different perspective it allowed me to view. Thanks Allan! |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Makes perfect sense to me now too. Wow, you are amazingly perceptive! A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails. |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
All I can say is FANTASTIC! Your work, with talent, knowledge and imagination all entwined, is extremely productive. Thank you for writing and sharing this great work. Rae |
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robin-shep Junior Member
since 2001-03-18
Posts 28northern California, USA |
Bravo! Bravo! Well crafted, man. |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Outstanding work. I did have to read it more than once to understand. I see the meaning as one who is searching, afraid yet pressing on for faith to believe. This is so good you need to write a follow up. Hope he makes it...*hint* Deb |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
This is a beautiful poem with a great deal of meaning woven into it. Acrostic poetry is very difficult to write and you did a beautiful job with this. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Allan, great job on this, I'm impressed "Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle" |
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