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Blondie Member
since 1999-08-06
Posts 307Ohio 
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*We had to write a poem today in class, and we only had 5 minutes to write it, so this is what I came up with. It's okay, I guess. For as the sun seems to break and over the glistening, tranquil lake The stems of green stealthily blow by the hawk's nest covered with snow But 'twas when the nightfall hit did all the rocks and fire split Causing summer's eve to turn to night the heat from the sun now far from sight Nature is taken for granted each day, stop and listen to what it has to say If you'd take some busy time out and take a detour from your route To sit by the glistening, tranquil lake and listen to the beauty as it spake. ------------------ "Therefore do not worry about tomorrow, for tomorrow will worry about itself. Each day has enough trouble of its own." Matthew 6:34 [This message has been edited by Blondie (edited 12-02-1999).] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
It's very very Ok!. Very lovely, indeed Elizabeth |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Take 5 ! tThat's five stars for this one. Very nicely done, Blondie. ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Lovely nature thoughts! ------------------ Denise |
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Blondie Member
since 1999-08-06
Posts 307Ohio |
Thanks so much you guys...you make the poem sound better than it is  haha |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Blondie, The poem is fine, For I read between the lines. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
In 5 minutes Creation told I see the lake I feel the cold I see the beauty Of which you write Reflected in Your words tonight For 5 minutes...you've created a vision that will last a lot longer. Good Job |
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Blondie Member
since 1999-08-06
Posts 307Ohio |
Thanks you two, that really means a lot to me. I guess it isn't too bad after all  |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
LOL - I could never write a poem in five minutes - well, not a serious one anyway - My hat's off to you, Blondie... |
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