Teen Poetry #2 |
Title Needed... |
Singer1981 Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 148Fredonia, NY USA |
Day breaks The sun appears on the horizon I swear it gets closer everyday As I run along the road I can feel the rays on my back Beating down On me Like he does when he gets mad But I'm not gonna cry I keep looking at the sun overhead To better things, and better days That I know are just around the corner She sings Like an angel out of the heavens I swear I see the light about her As she seems to float to me She opens her mouth and I hear No angel Just pain Nothing ever seems to change But I'm not gonna cry I keep looking at the sun overhead To better things, and better days That I know are just around the corner Just breathe She says to me, angel of my dreams I swear the pain will all dissapear The light is all around me I feel as if I am floating And I am Floating And I know I am safe But I'm not gonna cry I keep looking at the sun overhead To better things, and better days That I know are just around the corner. |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Wow..truly powerful...as for a name..how about "Angel of my Dreams"...you use it alot..just a suggestion |
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Singer1981 Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 148Fredonia, NY USA |
thanx I'll take that into consideration. |
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Oo0ostephanio0oO Member
since 2000-01-19
Posts 194Massachusetts ~USA~ |
keep up the powerful work..."The Vigor of I in My Days" (:***Stephani***:) "A true friend will always stay a friend whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end." |
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Kitty Junior Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 20Paris, Ontario, Canada |
Wow, thats all I can say. This is powerful stuff. He has made everything beautiful in its time Ecclesiastes 3:11 Kitty |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
That was so beautiful. I like "angel of my dreams", or maybe just "angel". |
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Singer1981 Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 148Fredonia, NY USA |
stephani, kitty, and lyric--thank you all for your comments, and lyric-I really do like Angel. It's simple...and it definitely says what I'm going for...all in that one word. THanks everyone I look forward to hearing more from all of you! ~Sarah |
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