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Teen Poetry #2

my girl, my spider

besttpoet
New Member

since 1999-12-30

Posts 6

0 posted 1999-12-30 01:33 AM

i can't believe you lef me os bad
crying like a brothja that saw tnothin i had
yeah i still love you girl
i', sorrty i hurt your feelings
but i had to get on with some dealings
girrrl
yo love is llkie a big black spider
i know now
girrl
you are the only spider for mwe

SuGaR*sTaR
New Member

since 1999-09-19

Posts 7
louisville,ky

1 posted 1999-12-30 02:02 AM

oh man, i really don't see the poetry in this one, i mean if it can even be deciphered throught the consistent misspellings. besttpoet, email me so we can discuss some poetry, as i think that it would do you good

Marilyn
Member Elite

since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

2 posted 1999-12-31 12:27 PM

Welcome to Passions. I agree with Sugar. This is very rough but your setiments come through very clearly. I have posted some poetry pointer links in the forum if you would like reference. If you would like some help with your poetry please feel free to e-mail me. The address is above...it is linked to the envelope icon above my reply.

Please do not be discouraged and never stop writing. It is a way to cleanse the soul. I hope to see more from you.

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