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NaTaLy
Junior Member

since 1999-08-16

Posts 43
brooklyn,ny,usa

0 posted 1999-12-12 11:07 AM

a little girl stands on the edge of a cliff.
a tear rolls down her cheek
shadows sudden all around her
mocking laughter growing louder and louder
getting closer
getting tighter
unable to breath
unable to think
unbearable laughter
filling her every thought
louder still
spinning round and round
agonizing
painful
her body aches
darkness closes all around her.
quiet now.

a little girl stands on the edge of a cliff
not a little girl anymore
and a single tear rolls down her cheek.
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poetry_kills
Senior Member

since 1999-12-04

Posts 549
new orleans

1 posted 1999-12-12 05:53 PM

i have mixed feelings about this poem... is it about rape or about insanity? i can't discern... it has some elements of rape (like the idea that she is no longer a little girl), but at the same time the shadows, laughter, then sudden silence bring images of insanity to mind... or perhaps it's actually about neither of those *heh*... please let me know...

sincerely,
**jerome the boy with no brain

Alwye

Moderator

Member Elite

since 1999-06-16

Posts 3850
In the space between moments

2 posted 1999-12-12 10:33 PM

I personally thought rape with this one...although I could be wrong. Wonderful job, keep it up!

*Krista Knutson*

"I can feel you breathe, it's washing over me, and suddenly I'm melting into you..." ~Faith Hill: Breathe~

NaTaLy
Junior Member

since 1999-08-16

Posts 43
brooklyn,ny,usa

3 posted 1999-12-20 11:56 PM

its actually about a girl going through puberty...but ok....lol

<~~~~funny girl

starboards
Member

since 1999-10-14

Posts 467
longwood, florida

4 posted 1999-12-21 12:01 PM

I like this poem because it could mean a couple of different things, and i think that's how poems should be...a reflection of the reader...

Starboards

"I wont look back, I wont regret, though it hurts like hell someday I will forget"

Fairy Colours
Member

since 1999-12-02

Posts 169
Sunrise,Fl,US

5 posted 1999-12-21 12:17 PM

Seems like you've written a winner

--A Little Fairy--

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