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An Ode to Lost Love
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An Ode to Lost Love |
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silent_iris New Member
since 1999-12-05
Posts 1 |
An Ode To Lost Love Once I knew life was okay But you left me all alone And now it doesn't seem okay so much Now I cry and cry and cry And I dont know when I'll stop Cause you left me with my tears And a broken heart and life You left me for another girl Someone you said you loved as much Someone who stabbed me in the back And made me sadder than sad You used to be my friend And sometimes you were more I loved you more than anything You were my everything But you left me all alone You handed me a load of crap And left me with this wad Of emotional toilet paper To try and wipe it all up But I dont know what to do anymore And so I'm left here with this crap Why did you leave me all alone I love you, I hate you, I need you ~iris |
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Rachel_A Member
since 1999-11-30
Posts 70North Webster, IN USA |
very good poem....your pain will fade, i promise 'tis better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all' |
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Kenneth Ray Taylor Member
since 1999-11-11
Posts 139Duluth, Minnesota, USA |
I love your poem. It brought tears to my eyes. A little punctuation would make it easier to read. You'll get over the creep (as well as the crap). |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Ah, the pains of love. Welcome to Passions! |
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Misty Member
since 1999-08-01
Posts 121USA |
silent_iris: This is a neat poem, I liked the part you compared it to crap! It was very thought out and meaningful, I liked it! Welcome to Passions, keep on posting! -Misty  ©Misty For more Poems bye Misty GO TO: http://www.geocities.com/Paris/Arc/1644 "You died a failure because you never tried!" |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Yes, welcome to Passions! The pain will indeed fade...give it time. Keep on posting!!  *Krista Knutson* "I can feel you breathe, it's washing over me, and suddenly I'm melting into you..." ~Faith Hill: Breathe~ |
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Star Fairy 2 Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 260cerritos, california, usa |
who ever said twaz better loved and lost than to never love at all must not have experiences the heart ache of losiing... and altho i believe that one day i'll look back and believe in that qoute, i know right now i do not, and i feel everythin you have written about iris.. it was well written.. great job... Don't Fall.. Rise in Love -------823------- |
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Natalie Guerrero New Member
since 1999-11-22
Posts 9 |
I thought it was a great poem! It was well written and it expressed your feelings well. Keep up the good work!!! |
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