The 'Joys' of Being a Teen

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Teen Poetry #2

The 'Joys' of Being a Teen

Rachel_A
Member

since 1999-11-30

Posts 70
North Webster, IN USA

0 posted 1999-12-05 10:40 PM

Oh, the 'joys' of being a teen
One day I feel nice, one day I feel mean
One minute I'm happy, the next I'm sad
I feel good, bad, good, bad
Oh, the 'joys' of being a teen
Guess I'll live with what I see.

poetry_kills
Senior Member

since 1999-12-04

Posts 549
new orleans

1 posted 1999-12-05 11:37 PM

this poem is the one i like best of yours so far, but i do have one suggestion for you: take out the quotes around "joys"... if you mean for it to be a sarcastic or satiric work, then the quotations tend to detract from the depth of the words themselves... the reader will understand the sarcasm as he/she reads and it will leave them with a much stronget impression of your meaning... (just a suggestion)

sincerely,
**jerome the boy with no brain

JOY 14
Senior Member

since 1999-09-22

Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA

2 posted 1999-12-06 02:59 PM

Had to reply to this one. The Joys of being a teen, gets an excellent review by Joy 14! Ha. Well, its very true.

JOY

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