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It's Not Okay.....(tell me what you think)
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It's Not Okay.....(tell me what you think) |
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Giggles Junior Member
since 1999-11-21
Posts 15 |
Now, because, as you so simply put it, “My feelings have changed,” I am expected to go on living life, pretending it’s okay. But it’s not. While I cry, I’m wishing for someone to hold me and comfort me. But you’re not here, so I must learn to comfort myself. And when my tears fall, I must learn to catch them myself, instead of waiting for you to come back, and brush them away. I wish I had a say, in what goes on around here. Because, to me, it’s not okay. I want the real you back. The you that made me smile, not cry. The you that made the good times and laughs, come so easily. I want the real you, the you I still love, by my side. When you have shared as much as you and I have, our hearts, dreams, thoughts and fears, when you know someone well enough to see sadness behind a smile, when two people believe in one another, you can be sure it’s love. Because you have felt it. Love is a blanket that comforts you and a handkerchief that catches your tears. Love is having someone to share with you every challenge, every joy, every trial in your life. I still need you, and want to share every challenge, every joy, and every trial in my life with you. But if you don’t need me, and you think it’s okay, then you will go. I will miss you. I won’t pretend it’s okay, because it’s not. But I will learn to comfort myself. I won’t hold on. But I’m not yet ready to catch my own tears. Because you said, “My feelings have changed,” I am expected to go on living life, pretending it’s okay. But it’s not. “If you love something, let it go, and it will come back to you.” I'm a newbie and would appreciate any comments or suggestions. Thanks! |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Welcome to Passions.  Your are right it is not okay but as you said yourself, we must go on. Nice work. |
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April Resi Member
since 1999-10-18
Posts 119Alabama |
I am so sorry for your loss... but just keep holding on because it always gets better. Welcome to passions... I hope to hear more from you soon! I really liked this poem, even though it was really depressing!!! April ------------------ ...in your eyes, I see my future in an instant, And there it goes, I think I found my best friend... |
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Lyndz Junior Member
since 1999-11-19
Posts 31 |
This is a nicely done poem. I can really relate to the feeling behind it. I think you had some good visual images as well as well conveyed emotional feelings. Lyndz ------------------ "Peace and Love, tears of joy, kindness of strangers. All of your roads paved in gold by Guardian Angels." ~~Blessid Union of Souls~~ |
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foxy_16 Junior Member
since 1999-11-21
Posts 31Lake Lillian, MN, USA |
this poem was very touching and emotional and you expressed what you were feeling very well. I hope whatever you're looking for you find- whether it be the one you lost, or someone new. Good Luck- keep writing works like this! ~Kayla~ |
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Star Fairy 2 Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 260cerritos, california, usa |
this was sadly beautiful great job in expressing ur feelings keep your head up ------------------ Don't Fall.. Rise in Love -------823------- |
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Giggles Junior Member
since 1999-11-21
Posts 15 |
yes it was kind of depressing but thanks so much for replying!! i could use the advice. |
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pop_tart14 Junior Member
since 1999-11-22
Posts 12North Dakota, USA |
this is a great poem. it's shows everything. i have to admit, i wish i would've written it. oh well. great job! *amanda* |
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Giggles Junior Member
since 1999-11-21
Posts 15 |
Thank you Amanda. I love reading poems here everyday!! Great job to everybody. |
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