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Hypocrite?
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Star Fairy 2 Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 260cerritos, california, usa |
I held you up on this mighty pedestal The epitome of what a person should be "Always striving to do what's right" But through the surface, no one could see. But you're just like everyone else Always trying to save yourself Just talking of what's right and wrong And always saying, "I'm by myself" Dwelling on all that hurts you Self-pitying yourself into depression Professing the hero has risen from the ashes Why not just submit to a confession? How can you be such a hypocrite? Drinks and kisses and lies Of course, when I did it, it's wrong But you do it, and it's just fine. Don't tell me circumstances were different Because they were definitely the same Neither one had security or commitment But I still took the punishment and blame I held you up on this mighty pedestal The epitome of what a person should be But it took one act for you to fall And now, you get absolutely no respect from me. ------------------ Happiness is a journey.. not a destination -------823------- [This message has been edited by Star Fairy 2 (edited 10-06-1999).] |
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Lauren Junior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 21FORT PIERCE ,FL |
i like this poem.....really good  |
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Babyjen01 New Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 2 |
You are a very talented poet and put so much meaning in your work. This poem is excellent, I can totally relate to it. |
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Star Fairy 2 Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 260cerritos, california, usa |
thanx guys... i appreciate it ------------------ Happiness is a journey.. not a destination -------823------- |
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Tal Junior Member
since 1999-10-05
Posts 27Singapore |
Um. This poem reminds me of my Dad. I like it... |
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Star Fairy 2 Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 260cerritos, california, usa |
ur dad? ------------------ Don't Fall.. Rise in Love -------823------- |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
I really liked this poem. I agree that no one should have respect unless they EARN it. ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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starboards Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467longwood, florida |
Ouch...i can feel the hurt in this one! but i like! good job! ******************* starboards ------------------ "If you love something let it go...if it comes back to you it is yours...if it doesnt then it never was" |
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Star Fairy 2 Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 260cerritos, california, usa |
thanx guys... this has been the one that'z got the most response out of all that i wrote.. thank you so much .. ------------------ Don't Fall.. Rise in Love -------823------- |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Start Fairy, have you posted in Open at all? there is a lot more interaction there. ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
this is really good. I thought i'd mosey on over here to teen poetry, glad i did ------------------ "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." -Charles Brugnot |
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