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The Mike Sacks Member
since 1999-08-29
Posts 129brooklyn ny 
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there was nothin more amzing then the night onthe beach we shared as i stared at ur face and how ur eyes glared at that moment i knew everything would be alright tonight as i berried my sorrows in ur arms and gave up without a fight But we both knew nothing would be after u spent ur last night with me ------------------ I wish i were a poet |
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Maitay Member
since 1999-07-16
Posts 158Sisters,OR,USA |
That was such a sweet poem. *clap* *clap* ------------------ ~The price of finding love is to eventually lose it. When I wish on a falling star, I wish not for material goods but to show kindness to others and be content with what the world may offer me~ ~Maitay Mirabel Litton~ |
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STACY Junior Member
since 1999-11-12
Posts 10veiNNie,ny |
you are the best poet i have ever seen. your poetry is the best and i have read alot of poerty |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
I am sorry I do not agree with Stacey. I believe you could be great if you wanted to be. You need to clean up these verses a little and you would be superb. You definately have talent...I would love to see you perfect it. You could go a long way. |
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The Mike Sacks Member
since 1999-08-29
Posts 129brooklyn ny |
i refuse to so called "perfect" it,if i did it owuldnt be my writing |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Mike **sigh** I really can't agree with STACEY either, you should at the VERY LEAST, correct the terrible spelling errors and stop abbreviating things....I will stop there, I don't want you to take that as a personal insult, just my opinion on your poetry. ------------------ Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Mike, you could be a great writer if you choose to be, but your gramatical errors, abreviations and spelling certainly do distract from your writing ------------------ Alis volat propriis (She flies with her own wings) |
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The Mike Sacks Member
since 1999-08-29
Posts 129brooklyn ny |
im not writing with any puntuation b/c im writing my thaughts ,and wen u think u dont stop with a period or put quites or nething like that |
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The Mike Sacks Member
since 1999-08-29
Posts 129brooklyn ny |
thanx |
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The Mike Sacks Member
since 1999-08-29
Posts 129brooklyn ny |
huh |
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The Mike Sacks Member
since 1999-08-29
Posts 129brooklyn ny |
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