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Daysleeper Member
since 2000-04-23
Posts 119 |
My Difference: World, pitying, empty and harsh, You've bound me from birth to you. You've beat me, bent me, broken me, While I struggle for what seems right, And true. Maker of men, Breaker of hearts, Taker of souls and minds. You can't take me, I'm different. Can't you see I'm different? I'm not alone... I'm not alone. Think of me, and I'll stand beside you. Know me, I'll hold your hand. Live me, you're my difference... You're what the world can't understand. [This message has been edited by Daysleeper (edited 04-24-2000).] |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Firstly welcome to Passions and I hope that you like it here.  Now on your piece, this is quite interesting. I enjoyed reading it for the simple fact of the heartfelt emotions that you have described. A line like "You've beat me, bent me, broken me, While I struggle for what seems right." is something that I read and went whoa! You have displayed your feelings in this piece very well. Nice job. ~AF~ "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement." Christopher Fry |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Indeed Welcome!  Some very powerful, sharp words in this piece. You did indeed express your emotions very well. Thanks for the exellent read and keep it up! *Krista Knutson* As soon as man does not take his existence for granted, but beholds it as something unfathomably mysterious, thought begins. ~*Albert Schweitzer*~ |
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DaZeD&cOnFuSeD Junior Member
since 2000-04-20
Posts 32 |
what they said heheheh DåzêÐ&CõñfûsëÐ dana |
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Daysleeper Member
since 2000-04-23
Posts 119 |
Thanks guys. I use to post on one of these boards... Long long ago, in a time before registration, under the name "Rabbit"... but I'm back here now, and again, because I simply can't stay away. Thanks for the encouragement. |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Wow!!! Welcome to Passions and what a brilliant first post! Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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4eva_at_heart Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238 |
welcome to passions!!! and great first post!! i know i am practically just repeating what others have written but you have used such great expression in your poem. well done Bec "whenever you are feeling alone...i'll take your hand in mine and we will walk together" |
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Daysleeper Member
since 2000-04-23
Posts 119 |
<font face="Comic Sans MS, Arial, Verdana" color="#000080" size="2">Thank you all for your input and encouragement. Read "A Lifetime Ago" if you would. I like it better then "My Difference", personally. But let me know what you think. Thanks again! ...Daysleeper...</font> [This message has been edited by Daysleeper (edited 04-24-2000).] |
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Blue Rose Junior Member
since 2000-04-20
Posts 18Vernonia OR USA |
I know every on else said it, but i thought I'd stick my two cents in here: The poem was great, very emotional! Good Luck in your future writing adventures! |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Welcome! good first post.. Aah, then I must read "A Lifetime Ago", also.. Well written.. strong words here, Daysleeper.. Lynne |
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angel6917 Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478WI |
Great first post, as everyone else said! I'm impressed... You're not alone~ there are some who think like you portray in this poem. Good job, and welcome to Passions. I look forward to more of your work. ~Kristi Lynn |
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sunshine17 Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 89Bonduel, WI USA |
This is a very good post. I like it very much. Good job. Gina |
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snowgirl17 Junior Member
since 2000-04-24
Posts 20Cloquet,Mn |
I awlays have the uncanny way of interputing things wrong but I like your peom and the messge it gave to me...The wods you have used are sharp ad harsh but make for a great peice...! |
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son of man Member
since 2000-04-25
Posts 125 |
this poem is great daysleeper. i can relate to it as well. i find the only thing that seperates me from the ever-growing cruelty of an ill-understanding world is the reality of my difference. without it, i would surely be swallowed uo in the raging swell of society and fall into the likes of this world. what or who does the world not understand? you, a loved one, or something other? in my eye, you are the author of masterpeices. |
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Daysleeper Member
since 2000-04-23
Posts 119 |
Son of Man- Awww... thank you for the compliment. Actually the person who I wrote this about is the one that let me down in my reply to your poem "Forever in a While." Right now, I don't know who my difference is... maybe it's this online community... maybe it's someone in my future. I just have faith that will always be someone... ...Daysleeper... |
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