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Losing Humanity
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Losing Humanity |
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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
Losing Humanity Darkened night I came cryin', wanting you to save me. i found you were lyin', you can't save me. Life in your hands what shall it be, shall i bow my head and lose my humanity. forked tounge of pride pokes out their eyes, blind leading the blind It's you I despise! for the world that wouldn't let me be, it stole my life- and now my life Life in your hands what shall it be shall i bow my head and lose my humanity they stole our innocence- instealed within us pride; a neverending circulation of man locked up inside. dealing with the passions, all they teach is lust. the norms have torn us down, our minds turned to rust-- and i see life in their hands, you think you're free. you continue the search- but only He holds the key! aimlessly wondering in a sea of hate worrying about your life, only seeing what you ain't. Life in your hands what shall it be will you hold your head high Can you see beyond me. ---Written by:Hoppy 2-??-00 "Any fool can make a rule, and any fool will mind it." Henry David Thoreau Don't look... you might see. Don't listen... you might hear. Don't think... you might learn. Don't walk... you might stumble. Don't run... you might fall. Don't make a decision... you might be wrong. Don't live...you might die. |
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natalie Member
since 2000-04-02
Posts 56 |
I've got one thing to say, NEVER LOSE YOUR HUMANITY. natalie... excellent work |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
Great poem, and it read very nicely while listening to "In the Hall of the Mountain King" Anywho, great poem, wish I had time to read and reply to more... damn school. "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \ I am lost in my own mind. Some say the world will end in fire, Some say in ice From what I've tasted of desire, I hold with those who favor fire. But if it had to perish twice, I think I know enough of hate To say that for destruction ice Is also great, And would suffice. -Robert Frost |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Great poem!! All I gots to say about it is the ol' three letter word: WOW!! Love and hugs, Lizzie  |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
This is very good, I especially liked the phrase *forked tongue of pride*. You've done a great job on this. Be cool.  *~Meredith~* *There is no destination where we are Please take me somewhere far Far away from this world of mine* (by me) |
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