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a wound like no other
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a wound like no other |
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4eva_at_heart Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238 |
dreams and reality i sometimes mistake for what i dream is what i desire to be loved by another to which i can return a love as majestic as the swirling flames of a fire the search can now be abandoned for a love like no other i yearned my heart has now been forever scarred for the heat of your fire has deeply burned since when before has a burn been so intense? a deep wound i now hold a wound filled with passion and no regrets i treasure this scar like a precious lump of gold another dream i will conjure in the hopes that again it will become real i dream that you will stay by me forever for i never want this wound to heal |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
This was fantastic, very intense and I liked it very much  Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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4eva_at_heart Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238 |
thanx tracie.....i just wrote it on the spot about five minutes ago  lol |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Very good Minda. This is a really good poem. I told you that you can write but no no no you don't listen. Great work dude. EGG |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Good expression with a nice poetic style. I think you can write dude. |
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devil_tongue Member
since 2000-03-02
Posts 50 |
This is very good Eva. I liked your choice of wording. |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
That was beautiful. I absoulutly loved it. You've got real talent here and the wording is extraordinary! I can totally relate to what you feeling.....and that's why I loved this so much. Great poem. Salma "Not all the answers lie within your realm or mine, they lie within the borders." |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
4eva I just had to add that your my kind of gal I love writing like that in fact most of the time my poetry is written on the spot, of course once I've written it out I go over it and maybe change a couple of words but thats it. keep it up you're doing greatKeep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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