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A walk in the sun |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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A Walk in The Sun Shallowing in a tropic sea Gathering antiquity's birth I dawdle in serenity. The body warms in sundry rays From whimsy's sip of mental mirth A tea baptismal in the waves. Absorbed in my temerity Left high and dry from neap's full worth I steep in rare exotic tea. Sacrosanct and minuscule. With inquiries of a fool. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This is great! You made me run to the dictionary to expand my vocabulary! Good one, Sy! |
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brandondinsmore Member
since 1999-10-27
Posts 142OKC, OK |
Ditto! It takes balls to use words like that. I mean, people that don't understand it have to TRY and do so. You're a great poet/writer, and you should definitely post some more because I am now greatly interested in your work. ------------------ |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
Ditto ditto. I'm sometimes afraid to use larger words for I fear I don't know the meaning of near enough. How embarassing to use one for rhyme that means something other than what was intended. ------------------ Once I was brilliant, now I no longer shine, but the twinkle in my eye speaks of another time. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, Thank you for the high praise. And I remain, Sacrosanct and minuscule With inquiries of a fool. *L* Brandon, I usually don't use words like sacrosanct and minuscule but you see what temerity will do. Thanks for the read and comment. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Seymore, interesting format, it works well. Nice use of vocabulary  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You need to know, I had to look up "neap"! The other words, I knew them...LOL! Now, if everyone here knew what it meant, I'll really look foolish. Oh well, how other than to spend a Friday? |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
RSEvans, I usually don't like large words but in this case it seemed to fit, thanks for the read. Hoot, I'm glad you liked the poem I feel it's a good one. Sunshine, A nice way to spend a friday and thank you for the read. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
I like the rhythm of this Sy, and like the rest, I used the dictionary too. A very good read! ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extrordinaire! [This message has been edited by Pepper (edited 10-29-1999).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I really liked this Seymour. For some reason I thought of TS Elliot's, "Love song..." Now I have a new word, neap, so thankyou. To "dawdle in serenity", wonderful! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
A lovely walk, indeed! Great one Seymour! (sorry for being so repetitious!)  ------------------ Denise |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Pepper, If you liked it I am happy it doesn't take much, just a comment. Thank you. Martie, So glad you enjoyed the read. Most water people are familar with the words neap tide. Denise, Hey, great is ok with me and especially from you. |
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