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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704
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how is it that someone comes and shines a moonbeam into your heart? but it's only an eclipse the substance was given long ago to another someone who is radiant someone loved forever how is it that this vision of woman this goddess is not complete? you cannot compete if only echoes if only before or later than that time you lost before you even began ------------------ 'Only the shallow know themselves.' Oscar Wilde. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
And you say I'm the grim one! This is a beautifully sad poem about FUTILITY (see, I'm getting to ya!) Well done Severn! ------------------ Everyone has a photographic memory... ...most of us just don't have film! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Hit the nail on the head again, Chris. |
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Seaangel Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 167Auckland, New Zealand |
wonderful poem again, Severn. I hope to see much more of your work around here. I liked the arrangement of your poem on the page. It's the sort of thing that inspires me to write a critical essay on it! You know, the mechanics of poetry and how white space isolates a word and magnifies it? Wow, I'd better go away and write a poem on poetry! |
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pen of passion Member
since 1999-08-11
Posts 234 |
Severn, your words capture defeat nicely. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Severn: You've beautifully captured that "I never stood a chance, did I?" realization!! Great job! |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
And guess what? She never did have a chance!!!! I snagged her good! (NOW talk about futility love!)  |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Nope - doesn't mean a thing anymore (you are too sweet - pulling all these up love!) |
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