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Newguy Junior Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 36Moultrie, GA, USA |
Fists to the Sky What have we done to deserve this? Supposedly you look down, watching. Why do you allow this to happen? Oh, great you must be, a "shepard" to us, the sheep. Watching us suffer, watching us die, watching us waste away. Is this the world that you created and are so proud of? I have to laugh, I have to snicker. We are all down here, losing what we love, losing what we work for, And losing our minds and our sanity. Yes, watch us suffer, stare at our misery, And just wait until you can "save" us one day When we are dead and gone from everything we could possibly enjoy. So continue to rule us, oh mighty one, Perhaps we'll tithe you some more...... Please don't kill me for that poem... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I think we all have times when it seems no one cares and our prayers are only going into empty space... there are definitely times when it's hard to see the hand of a merciful God and faith seems to have fled. If that's the path you're walking now, I hope you find peace soon... even if the answers elude you. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
New Guy No slings and arrows from me. I wonder if there is anybody who hasn't felt the same at one point or another in their life. I do have one suggestion... This is a poem of anger about a loss or losses (my guess). So, the line where you said, I have to laugh, I have to snicker The snicker is of derision, but the poem speaks of pain. Perhaps? I have to laugh because it hurts when I cry. I thought your poem was great - you didn't pull punches and mince around the subject for fear of controversy. Good, gutsy writing. |
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