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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion 
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In Control Long John If I could hate just a little bit more, Than the person who's hating me. I'm sure I'd feel better than I did before, When it was only me who could see. . . . How her hate defines everything she does, How it's corrupted her body and soul. How it rules her thoughts; but, not mine because, I keep MY hate under control. If I could write with a little more hate, I know inside I'd feel so much better. I've more class than her, she's second rate, So she deserves every hate-filled letter. If I could show others my hate is right, Then I'm doing what needs to be done. See. My hate doesn't eat from inside; But, she's consumed by what she's become. And every hateful, vile word she composes, Every riposte and vituperative claim, I acknowledge with the hate that reposes, Within me (but not part of my name). Unlike her, I've a heart overfilled with caring, For my friends and all of their dreams. Unlike her's, my hate is just and worth sharing, Because my hate doesn't tear at the seams. . . . Of others who find they've been swept up, In this chicken-or-egg feud we're sharing. I've hated her so long because she's kept up, Implying I'm not filled with caring. Its true my hate has overflowed to my friends, Who, like me, keep their hate in control. They are only defending what I represent, Not like her friends, who haven't a soul. I know there are times when my hate overcomes Whatever potential for I love I possess. Yet, I've been in control of each thing I've done, So, my hate's firmly controlled (I guess). It isn't important that our mutual hate drives The lives that we seem to abhor. I need to hate more to make sure I survive, And thereby love just a little bit more. |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Back to the top you go! I really liked this one! It reminds me of someone I once knew, she was so consumed by hate and fury that her whole life passed her by without her knowing it. It is true that hate is a very powerful fuel, but it quickly burns that which is driven by it. Thank you for posting this! |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Satiate Thank you for the review. I've seen the same thing, too. A witty, funny, intelligent person so wrapped up in anger that he or she alienates everybody. A lesson I learned only a short time ago: Forgiving somebody else doesn't let him off the hook; it lets YOU off the hook. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Very nice rythym and rhyme with this one |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
thanks, Hoot |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Wonderful tongue in cheek presentation with a strong message. |
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