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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets 
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No more guessing at the heavens, I tire of this rolling wheel of unexplainable nonsyncretism. No longer willing to just accept mentally or bodily, this strange concept of disestablishmentarianism. I can't question the motives of those so fruitless in their attempts to hinder with the strings of such a miniscule lute the actions of a country well denied its very own culture in an attempt to "socialize" it. But I am quite spiritually disinclined to step forward any longer against these dark entities that stand for "liberty and justice" for the people, and hold a different form for themselves. I will sit back in the shadows and watch the warfare continue and my friends be slaughtered with handcuffs and a gavel and postpone forever my own attempts to be heard. ------------------ Even with a lot of imagination, does it make the story less true? [This message has been edited by Masked Intruder (edited 07-25-99).] |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
All day in the sun last night? What?!? That set aside, you put a poetic technique to good use in this poem: paradox. It kind of gives you something to think about. Thanks for sharing, Masked Intruder.  |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
I can't believe I just screwed that up so bad. LOL I copied the wrong poem into the box. Whoa dear...I'm having problems. I'll try again. I'll put that other poem up too...sorry bout that. ------------------ Even with a lot of imagination, does it make the story less true? [This message has been edited by Masked Intruder (edited 07-25-99).] |
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Ron
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-05-19
Posts 8669Michigan, US |
You are far, far too young to become cynical just yet, my friend. And any poet that can effectively squeeze "disestablishmentarianism" into his verse will be heard! |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
My Gods of earth, fire, soul, and rain. It is such a pleasure to see MI's name I know not where to begin! Cynicism? Not quite your thing.... but a great attempt! Fabulous! |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
MI, my friend! This is a very interesting piece. I've read it through several times and get more out of it each time. It makes statements socially, politically, and emotionally. Good job. (Oh, and I agree with Ron about the usage of "disestablishmentarianism"... very cool, my'friend.... But why do youth and cynicism have to be exclusive... you have just as much right to be a cynic as any one of us...LOL... I believe a good dose of a cynical sardonic attitude can help keep things in perspective... congratulations for coming to the same conclusion so early in life... hehehe) |
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Partner In Crime #1 Junior Member
since 1999-07-21
Posts 13 |
Hey, since when did I give you permission to be a cynic? [This message has been edited by Partner In Crime #1 (edited 07-26-99).] |
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TheGreenPolarBear Junior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 38Kansas |
Hey, great poem. Probably one of the best I've seen out of you in a while. Keep writing you crazy raccoon, and I'll keep reading. "On the turning away From the pale and downtrodden And the words they say 'Which we won't understand Don't accept that what's happening Is just a case of others' suffering Or you'll find that you're joining in The turning away'" -- Gilmour  |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
Cynicism wasn't exactly the first thing that came to me when I was writing this, but I guess it is pretty apparent. Thanks for everybody's responses. Hey, GPB! Did you get a new book that I haven't seen yet? I like the quote. ------------------ Even with a lot of imagination, does it make the story less true? |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
...and it's about time we see some more good postings under your name around here...  |
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