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Black and Crunchy
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Black and Crunchy |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow 
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Black and Crunchy I watch you sleeping as your lovers body entwined about you, like my web to a feast of my palate. I've attempted to crawl through those satin sheets trying to grip on ... Only sliding to the ground. I'm perched above you now like Tarzan in the jungle ready to spin me toward you with passion of exploration. I release my silk... Slowly lowering to your body. My hairy black and crunchy body has descended upon you now exploring you inch by inch. I've discovered a hollow cave that a ferocious creature must occupy... With it's mighty roar it's a wonder how you sleep. Curiosity has it's chains on me so exploring I will go, one foot at a time... Times eight and I'll be in. It feels weird in here kind of damp, yet arid. The sound echo's off the walls making me shake with fear. What's happening? The walls are closing in... I'm floating away through some narrow channel Plop... Into some gurgling fluid I fall. I'm sinking to my demise farewell, and sweet dreams all my sleeping friends. (I recently read that in our lifetime we eat about 8 spiders in our sleep) |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Very Tasty. Thanks for the treat. I'm still laughing  |
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Rita Member
since 1999-07-19
Posts 55Danville Va. 24540 |
misleading, but the visuals were there.......nicely done..... |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
very cleverly constructed...at first i thought it was a love poem...thanks for the different twist  ------------------ If I had my mouth I would bite. If I had my liberty I would do my liking. In the mean time, let me be that I am, and seek not to alter me. ~~~Shakespeare~~~ |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I'm sleeping on my tummy tonight! |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
The body does need protine and I suspect there are less spiders in the world because someone asleep swallowed. Tonight I'll sleep with a mask over my face. Delightful! |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
I would like to thank all of you for your responses. I have to say I had a blast writing this. Thanks Andrew Scott, for inspiring me (little did you know that you would)How a simple comment can jump-start a stalled mind. Rita and elvira, sorry to elude you. It just flowed well this way for me. Sir Balladeer, I don't think you have to worry for I don't know how you have time to sleep, while creating all the masterpieces here, that enlighten us all. Ohme, I would say that a mask is probably the only sure bet, yet maybe we've already had our quota, so no need to worry right? |
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