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grandiloquent
Member

since 1999-07-08

Posts 104
Midwest America

0 posted 1999-07-08 11:49 PM

daybreak hinting around the skylight
CDs blasting serene melodies
feeling giddy in the Morningafter
as the cold arranges what I think
cozy-shimmy down in my four-poster
empty now except for me
dozy with your taste in my mouth
& the exquisite commotion that you leave
shadowprints my body over, waning warm spots in my bed
must leave the covers the way they tangled
when, with watch advice, you shyly fled
mind slipping easy with the flu of you
fever burning up my eyes and lips and fingertips
dizzy stars around my head --
me sinking in my stupid grin
vain attempts to sleep to dream about you
as I giggle and push the pillow in

~one voice~
Senior Member

since 1999-07-08

Posts 664
Billings, MT USA

1 posted 1999-07-09 12:09 PM

This us absolutely breathtaking! I love it! I really do! It is so vivid in my mind! I'm looking forward to reading more!

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~one voice~

For Myself, I live,
Live intensely and am fed by life,
and my value, whatever it be, is in my own kind of expression of that. *Henry James

thursdayschild
Member

since 1999-07-01

Posts 169
Houston, Tx.

2 posted 1999-07-25 09:30 PM

Perfectly passionate. Love your way with words! Great poem, thanks for sharing

poetFemmeFatale
Member Elite

since 1999-07-25

Posts 2646
Arkansas

3 posted 1999-07-25 09:34 PM

Wowweee!! Makes me feel naughty - like I've been watching you....he he he Excellent choice of words to paint a picture so vivid I thought I was there!

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- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet

Balladeer

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

4 posted 1999-07-25 11:42 PM

I can visualize, and taste, this poem.

(and, btw, I have responded to EVERY poem you have written, in both forums. Do I count?)

[This message has been edited by Balladeer (edited 07-25-99).]

grandiloquent
Member

since 1999-07-08

Posts 104
Midwest America

5 posted 1999-07-25 11:48 PM

Balladeer: Yes, you count, thank you very much for your comments (my appreciation also extends to all others who have bothered to add their two cents). I'm learning the value of "reload" on this page

... be patient with me.

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