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Ted Reynolds
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since 1999-12-15

Posts 331

0 posted 2000-03-13 03:42 PM

    WRITING A SCREENPLAY

(A man and a woman are sitting in a coffee shop, nursing their
coffee cups.  She is in her thirties, neat executive clothes; he in his
fifties, a bit scruffy.  Medium camera angle over her left shoulder.)
     Woman's voice: But I don't love you.
     (Close-in shot of man.  He pushes his cup about vaguely for
something to do, looks a bit embarassed at having pushed her to this
admission.)
     Man: That's okay.
     Woman:  But you're the best friend I have.
     (He gives her a wan smile.)

     [Crumple up page and throw it in wastebasket.  New start.]

     (A man and a woman are sitting in a luxurious night club, nursing
their shot glasses.  Sound of a sax playing the blues.  She is in her
thirties, low-cut evening dress; he is in his fifties, three-piece suit.
Medium camera angle over his right shoulder.)
     Woman: (throwing her arms out in appeal) You must realize that I
can never be in love with you.
     Man:  (He stiffens; his hand agonizingly clutches his heart.)  Then
all is eternally over for me.  But I shall never blame you, my dearest.
     Woman: Do not despair.  In all the world, you will always be my
truest friend.
     Man:  In the short time remaining to my weary existence, that must
be my consolation.  (He pulls a small pistol from his pocket, and holds
it to his temple.)

     [Crumple up page and throw it at wastebasket, missing.  New start.]

     (A man and woman are lying close together on a lonely tropic
beach.  Both in their thirties, good-looking, wearing as few clothes as
the censors will allow.  Medium close shot as she turns towards him and
speaks.)
     Woman: You know I don't love you.
     Man: (shrugging) Does that matter?
     Woman:  I guess not.  (They embrace.)

     [The screen writer contentedly continues writing this scene.  Say,
as long as we're fantasizing . . . ]

[This message has been edited by Ted Reynolds (edited 03-13-2000).]

Dusk Treader

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Senior Member

since 1999-06-18

Posts 1187
St. Paul, MN

1 posted 2000-03-13 04:39 PM

Too bad the last scene happens far to often in the play of life... Interesting story you've got here, a good read.

Abrahm Simons

Put one foot on the path of life and tread the dagger's path betwixt dark and light.

Martie

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

2 posted 2000-03-13 05:42 PM

I enjoyed this very much...unusual and captivating and left me with a smile.

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