Critical Analysis #1 |
14,000 Things to be Happy About (#13) |
Ted Reynolds Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 331 |
STARTING TO MAKE THINGS HAPPEN There's so much to be done' You won't catch us nappin'. Let's get on the road, Startin' to make things happen! We've got to get taxes And all of that crap in. So out forms and pencils, And start to make things happen. But before we do that There is such a huge gap in Our wide correspondence (From N'Awleans to Ja'pan.) And I'm behind on my joggin', Ought to get another lap in, And post something to the Forum To get 'em all clappin'. And the walks must be shovelled, And we should be trappin' Those birds in the dryer -- Or something may happen. Just to plan it all tires us, So don't come a-rappin' On our door just now, 'cause You'd just find us nappin'. |
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Wordshaman Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 110Illinois, USA |
Hahaha....this was awesome...the rhyme matched the content, and it flowed perfectly. And I can totally relate. See you around, I'm sure. Wordshaman |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
I liked this very much. And the gotta "post somethin' in the Forum" part is why I'm "behind on my joggin'". Anyone interested in joining a Passions twelve step program with me? Jim "If I rest, I rust." - Martin Luther |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Amen, brothers. Pete |
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Kirk T Walker Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 357Liberty, MO |
That's funny. I love the way the first and last stanzas are opposites "you won't catch us nappin'" and "You'd just find us nappin'". I also like the way you used the "-ing" words to ryhme by slicing off the "g", since often people pronounce them this way. Nice work. |
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