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Hawk183
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since 1999-12-24
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0 posted 2000-01-03 01:33 PM


In your eyes I have never been lost,
A fire that keeps me sane,
There in the shadow of hope I seek only to find the light.

The wishes that are cast like comets from my mind,
search for refuge in your heart.

I have wished a thousand times, great and powerful words of prayer,
yet there seems to be no home.

My own heart bleeds with songs I cannot sing,
it burns with words that mean too much,
and yet you already know.
I vow that irony will not destroy my faith,
That the test that became torture will not burden my soul,
This I have made my goal.
Places I have been urge me back, and the sweet taste of your heart calls my name,
Hinting at the hope of revisiting that which I cast away.

Then the light was seen, shown in the granduer of a pivotal moment,
and the wish became a dream.
Dreams of blues skies and your touch, of home and your smile, things that I have missed.
And it truly was the smile that changed me,
left me looking back at the cold, and remembering what is like to freeze.

A wish I wished for you, a practiced ritual,
so simple in the making,
One dream, one hope, one burning question.
To you I wish the happiest days, the loveliest nights,
I will be there, in your arms or in my mind, but certainly I will smile as well.
To love you, as I always will, means to let you love, to hold you in my heart, even when yours rest someplace else.


 

© Copyright 2000 Ryan Whittington - All Rights Reserved
warmhrt
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since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563

1 posted 2000-01-04 09:46 AM


Hawk,
This is a lovely poem with well-chosen words, speaking of the purest kind of love ... that in which you wish the beloved happiness at all cost, even if it means they are with someone else. There are few that are capable of this kind of love. You wrote about it so very soulfully. Nice work.

warmhrt

roxane
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since 1999-09-02
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2 posted 2000-01-04 11:41 PM


i knew this was going to be one of those poems in which the narrator sacrifices himself, but you have added another dimension to it, and i don't know how.  the ending is lovely, and made more wonderful by the good intentions of the narrator throughout the poem.  this is really great.
Hawk183
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since 1999-12-24
Posts 130

3 posted 2000-01-05 06:37 PM


Thank you both for the compliments...

Warmhrt....All are capable...it is few who see the beauty in loving unconditionaly, but have faith...

Roxanne...I am pleased that you were not left bored by this one...it came to me in less time than it took me to type it...don't know if that's good or bad?

Renee
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since 1999-11-07
Posts 18
langhorne, PA 19047
4 posted 2000-01-05 08:27 PM


Very Beautiful as well as true to what often happens. To love someone that deeply and realize that the same love is not brought back to you, but is given to someone else, is very sad.  However, you have brought a new light to the sadness when you continue to love, reguardless of whether or not it is given in return.

 Linda Renee

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