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Fairy Colours Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 169Sunrise,Fl,US |
It's just so hard to let go of you Because you were so much apart of My Life It gets too hard sometimes to just Let go and think of you as Only a friend Sometimes my heart aches so bad That it hurts to even smile But that what I have to do everyday So that people don't know that I'm Not alright My mind and my heart are constantly At war with each other Because my mind says I know I'm Not in love But my heart says that's a lie I miss the little things about you That use to mean so much to me Those were the things that made My eyes wild with excitement Everytime you laughed Everytime you smiled And everytime I looked at you and knew what you were feeling and thinking... And when I think of what I lost My heart aches with the sweet Memories of you I know that this isn't the bomb so help me out. ( I was actually going to send this to my ex who dumped me, then I figured if he dumped me he wasn't worth it) |
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mister61 Junior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 41bergen county, nj |
Good call on not sharing this with the subject, I think. Worth it or not, just more pain in the long run. This may not be the bomb stylistically, but That Feeling is all over every word. It's very clear and much too familiar. I don't know what you'd change, because it's expressed so well. |
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Fairy Colours Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 169Sunrise,Fl,US |
Thanks so much Mister. This is actually the first and only poem I put my whole heart into. I'm glad I kept this to myself and you guys only. It's much more appreciated here. --A Little Fairy-- |
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