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Nightspear
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since 1999-10-20
Posts 8
Michigan, USA

0 posted 1999-10-30 12:03 PM


A verry close friend wrote this. Please let me know what you all think and I am honoring any title suggestions

I know I said I was guilty and I regret everything,
I wish you would forgive me for it all, I know the sadness it will bring.
I loved you at that moment, for a while it was just right,
But then it ended and now I know you cry yourself to sleep at night.
The pain I have inflicted on my body and in my heart,
I've lost all hope for us as I sadly watch us part.
I trust you with my life; you chased away my fears,
But you can't help me when I cry, can't chase away the tears.
So many times I've watched it and told myself beware,
The love we shared is gone, I wonder, do you still care?

Your face appears in my dreams; your voice is in my head,
I walk without knowing that the love we had is dead.
Now I know what heartache is, let me tell you this,
After thoughts of when we touch, every time we kiss.
I have to keep my head up high, try to give a smile,
Getting over you isn’t easy; it'll take a while.
But you'll be here to comfort me, right up till the end,
Just because the love is gone, doesn't mean you’re not my friend.

I used to say I love you, I used to hold your hand,
I would listen when you talked and truly understand.
We still sit and talk at night, about nothing, really at all,
But sometimes I sit crying, just waiting for your call.
Just waiting to hear your voice, to see what you will say,
The pain will not leave, please make it go away.
I just wish you were here to hold me as I cry,
To sit with me and watch our love, watch it slowly die.



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Nighspear{~*~}


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merlynh
Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 411
deer park, wa
1 posted 1999-10-31 12:12 PM


I? Can't really say.
-DEE-
Junior Member
since 1999-10-29
Posts 14
SOUTH AFRICA
2 posted 1999-10-31 05:19 AM


Very moved by this poem - dare I say it even brought a tear... it echos so much of my life right now....

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-DEE-

"We feel what we feel, 'cause we do what we do;
we do what we do, 'cause we feel what we feel"

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