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Critical Analysis #1

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anotherbrickinthewall
New Member

since 1999-09-28

Posts 1
angola,ny.america

0 posted 1999-09-28 09:31 PM

The square of a cirlce ,The eye of my mind,Love form the heavens keeps me alive.The rope that i climb up is ready for flight ,purple and green bubbles of light ,indulging in my mind....captured by my hands the ring of the fire.
Up against the wall ,the clouds of stone,listen to the tale it told.Remember laying eye level with my feet,feeling the vibration...come along....closer...closer....now its gone!

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ann C.

Brad
Member Ascendant

since 1999-08-20

Posts 5705
Jejudo, South Korea

1 posted 1999-09-30 04:30 AM

I've only have two suggestions for now.

1. Clean up the spelling. We all make mistakes and have typos but at least at this forum you can edit when you miss something.

2. I know time may be a factor but try to comment on other poems. Much can be learned from a little reading and interaction.

Brad

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