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I Should Have Been
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I Should Have Been |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas 
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I Should Have I died and went to heaven, and was so shocked I begged to be dropped below but they wouldn't do it, said I deserved more than that; but I left you to die, at home, alone, while I went to the store for a few bottles of beer. I left you to die, alone, and hell is where I belong, with the others of my kind. I don't care how long ago it was, I don't care that you were dead long before I left, I don't care if you were in an unresponsive state of life, if machines kept you alive, if your mind was in some other-where, if . . . if . . . I just don't care. I wasn't there when you died, and I should have been. . . . wesley james beard, jr. Hope this comes across more as a "love" piece, rather than a "sadness" piece, but as long as it works somewhere, I'll take it. j. [This message has been edited by jwesley (06-25-2017 08:23 PM).] |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
It is touching for sure Jimmy. You took on a perspective not commonly thought of. The love is clearly there but there is no overlooking the sadness. ~L |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Nice poetry . . . Can sink your teeth into it. ~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~ |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
some regrets can haunt us, there is "something" deeply poignant in your words yann |
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Poet In Pink Senior Member Posts 1066 MI |
Hello Jimmy ~ A touching piece my friend...Feels like love and some regret & sadness mixed in ~ Enjoyed reading ~ Alana |
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