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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL 
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As a shifting breeze touches unquiet city, Lights impose on what night sky intends. Sometimes dark just needs to be.
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Eloquently stated. Dark has a shine all its own not many recognize. Would love to bask in it on a rooftop with you at 3 A.M. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Micheal, Thank you. This one was actually edited. I read something in one of Nan's old threads about the use of too many articles in free verse, so I have been trying to keep that in mind. However, I will stubbornly continue to use them when I feel like they belong to the effect. 3 a.m rooftop sounds like a nice place.
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
I’m gonna have to look up what exactly Nan refers to as an article. In my humble and completely un-asked for opinion, I can understand there being rules on “structured” poetry, but I was not aware there were any rules to “free verse.” How is it to be considered free if that’s the case? I am not a big fan of shortening anything for the sake of brevity, especially when the artists is as obviously talented as you are, and there is very little, if anything, offered by you that does help build the poem. That’s what makes a climax a climax you know? Proper building technique. I want to be lead down the rabbit hole, the deeper the better, article by article. Truly, I believe an artist’s pen (or soul as I know that’s where the words truly come from), should be their boss, and they should simply, in free verse, let them roll. Apologies for my varied opinion, Nan. I still love & miss you. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
There is something unique about 3 am. I am a frequent flier there. It is a good time to wonder and wander words around. ~L |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Temptress...Much wisdom in your words. Especially the last line "Sometime dark just needs to be " Keep safe from that storm. I will do the same over here in southern Ms...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Lori, Thank you. It has to be a writer's curse for the mind to be so awake at night.
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Paul, Thank you. There are useful things in the dark. The storm was just a dump of rain here. I sat on my front porch through a lot of it. I have friends in Ocean Springs, MS who sometimes get flooded into their neighborhood. If you don't mind my asking, where in South MS?
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Temptress, Yes..That closing line right as rain. Enjoyed, Sky~ [This message has been edited by augustsky (06-29-2020 06:32 PM).] |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
So true, Temptress. |
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Temptress
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Augustsky and Marchmadness, Thank you so much for the attention to this. I'm glad to be back here to share and read. This feels like home, and the support means a lot to me after years without it. "How much is real? So much to question |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Time to let the darkness shine. Beautifully written. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
As a daughter of the night, I see the wisdom here. |
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