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In the dip
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In the dip |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa 
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Down in that dip beneath what I see waves of memory wash over me and sometimes they cool my restlessness to leave me refreshed and perfectly calm. Then there are times when the waves are wild and toss me about like a piece of driftwood but I must be that because life cut asunder the good and honest, the true meaningful. Driftwood of course has no memory; it’s just a thing discarded, useless, with no “inside” to dictate the times of good to bad or laughter to frowns. No wishing, no hoping, no longing to be a piece of driftwood can ever ere be and so in that dip there’s work in progress to calm those, oh, so very wild waves. Come on waves, come hither to me, calm like the day before knowing love! Helen / 16 January 2015 |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Ahhh . . I love that last line kicker, Helen. Driftwood and the turbulent sea, quite a metaphor for loves treacherous waters. ~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
fine imagery and analogy ... I find driftwood to be rather fascinating stuff ... and, in this double-post-modern world of the "Runaway American Dream" it is rather easy to feel like psycho-emotional 'driftwood' ... |
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jjote Senior Member
since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088Ontario, Canada |
I am not sure that you really want the title to be "dip", and not deep, which may be where driftwood can be tossed aimlessly by angry waves. But I like it when you make yourself as a driftwood still challenging the waves to come to you and be calm once more. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thank you, Jerry, Bruce and jjote - and, yes, could have been "deep" but dips can over time even out but deep is deep forever and that's not such a good idea. |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Honey,I also admire driftwood and it might be nice to be floating throught the dips and waves and come out of it so beautiful and picked up and cared for as a treasure. best to you, jo |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Very nice love the calm after turbulence, just life as many know it. Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Clever analogies, Helen. Enjoyed. Ida |
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