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Open Poetry #49

The Moon Is A Liar

Redstart
Senior Member

since 2014-05-16

Posts 535

0 posted 2014-12-13 09:34 PM

The moon is a liar.
Secret shadows of youth
cannot tell the future.
Behind that pavilion of us,
seems no longer us,
though we lay
in the sweet grass of truth.
We learned together
the coy age of passing innocence.
Memories of books and touch.

Weddings bring back those days.
He placed a ring upon your finger,
and you looked at me.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2014-12-13 09:50 PM

Ahhh . . . Kickass poetry Redstart. My kind of in your face stuff. NOW whose the star???

Dammit I'm Mad is Dammit I'm Mad spelled backward.

Gale
Senior Member

since 2013-06-10

Posts 578
Russia

2 posted 2014-12-14 06:19 AM

It's very sad when people become close to each other and then part and live further like strangers.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2014-12-14 07:06 AM

Can we actually imagine how often this happens? I am touched by your most effective and I dare say brilliant poem.

Not many might have the possibility to "look at the other", but we don't know what goes on within the secrete folds of hearts ...

Sad no doubt, but every path of life has its deviations from original dreams ...

Margherita

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

4 posted 2014-12-14 04:47 PM

What a powerful, catch you off guard ending. I'm really enjoying your work Redstart!

latearrival
Member Ascendant

since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

5 posted 2014-12-14 06:27 PM

Redstart,I enjoyed your poem. I see a story in the last three lines. A bit of a sad one? jo

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

6 posted 2014-12-14 07:06 PM

Yeah! She was probably saying "See what you missed, huh!!" (hee hee)

Really loved the last three lines - so well expressed, and related/closed the rest of the piece very well.

j.

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

7 posted 2014-12-15 02:39 AM

very nice, i adore the last verses, i thinks the images made me think of how memories really matter

yann

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