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Redstart
Senior Member

since 2014-05-16

Posts 535

0 posted 2014-07-08 08:25 PM

I never said, goodbye, did I?
Just our cold kiss.
Did you wonder why I wasn't there?
Did you think I didn't care?
They said that you were unaware
in your final sleep,
but I knew that you were there.
When I spoke to you,
I saw a silent tear
that left your eye.
Was that our last goodbye?

No, it wasn't, was it?
You knew I needed more.
So you came again, in my dream,
to the flowered verge
by the little stream.
Is that you, son? You were saying,
as they were laying
you down among the roses.

You weren't old;
your hair had lost its grey,
and you smiled a toothy smile
they way you used to.
I kissed you again,
and it wasn't cold.
You said, what a beautiful day,
we should go on holiday,
to Cornwall again.
I tried to smile a lie
and hide my pain.
But you saw my tears,
my crushing fears,
and knew those days
were gone forever.

You put your hand on my cheek;
kissed me with your eyes.
It hurt so much to wake,
but I knew that you'd come back
to say goodbye.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2014-07-08 08:51 PM

Okay guy, this touched me deeply. Anything else I might say could not mean more than what I already said. Okay, I'll try. This is a very sensitive piece of writing that many people will be able to relate to. I most certainly did.

~*~ When politicians give up on liberty, it falls to poets to preserve it. Or write its epitaph. ~*~

bel1e
Senior Member

since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

2 posted 2014-07-08 08:53 PM

Goodbyes are always sad...this wrenches the soul, Red...

Write-on

Paula Finn
Member Ascendant

since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

3 posted 2014-07-08 09:03 PM

So sadly written

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

4 posted 2014-07-08 10:38 PM

Masterfully done.

Lori

latearrival
Member Ascendant

since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

5 posted 2014-07-08 11:06 PM

That last Goodbye, yes very hard to say. Felt it strongly. Good writing. Jo Perry

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

6 posted 2014-07-09 06:31 PM

Deeply touching. Goodbyes are tough. Not having a chance for one is even worse. When that happens I think our minds strive to give one, whether through dream or some other means, as if our only chance to ever know peace again depends on it.

Michael

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

7 posted 2014-07-11 07:23 PM

You are truly a gifted poet red...
I'm really glad you are here, your poetry is layered with deeply seeded truths that apply to human nature on so many levels.

Brava Sir!!!

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

8 posted 2014-07-12 05:38 PM

Very beautiful. I understand this completely. Although I didn't have parents who wanted a relationship with me, my bond with my beloved horse to whom I belonged for 20½ years and knew him for 2 years before that) was legendary. I was with him when he went to Heaven at the age of 37½ human years, but he returned in 6 dreams that I knew of - I think there were more before the first one, but that he made sure I didn't remember them in case I was expecting him to be on Earth when I woke up. I believe he broke me into the dreams gently.

Tears
Owl

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