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ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

0 posted 2012-04-25 05:15 AM

April snow

White snow on green leaves
Trees bend, as all must obey;
Mercy prayers in breeze.

Test to try Abrahams faith?
God prebreaking Isaacs limbs?

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After

Cheeks flushed pink-light rouge,
Wet hair, to her forehead stuck
Eyes rolled back, but shut.

Fingers still griping the sheets,
Breaths slow down-even in beat.

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Special

I should feel special;
"Your preferred shoppers card, please"
The clerk does a scan...

It does not boost my ego;
I walk from the store mumbling.

[This message has been edited by ice (04-25-2012 06:03 AM).]

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2012-04-25 05:50 AM

Nicely written, one and all, Ice. I like the last one the best. Somehow we have taken the feeling of being special out of the world these days. We are,one and all, robots to the machinery of life.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

2 posted 2012-04-25 05:53 AM

quote:
Mercy prayers in breeze.

Beautiful is this powerful motion of your heart. Tough testing indeed! Ah, the snow, we love it so much when it comes in its right time, but on buds and green leaves it makes us so sad. Let's put it this way, snow behaved like a bad boy, who now will repent and send healing sunshine.

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quote:
Breaths slow down-even in beat.

Just the right kind of relaxation that brings serenity

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quote:
It does not boost my ego

Our every move is monitored, every action traceable ... freedom restricted, no doubt.

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Excellent, inspired work, dear Ford. I have never written anything in this form ... I lack patience!

Margherita

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

3 posted 2012-04-25 05:56 AM

Thank you Jerry.

I am glad someone else is bothered by the advertisers of their products in a subliminal fashion.

Just give me a fair price on things, and quit the jive about how special I am to you... 'cause I pay for my specialness in hidden ways...50 cents off of bread is added to the price of hamburger..

And I aint special at all...just fooled.

Startime1955
Senior Member

since 2012-04-22

Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada

4 posted 2012-04-25 11:03 AM

Each one carries its own vision and I enjoyed them all...thank you for the read

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

5 posted 2012-04-25 05:41 PM

I guess no one is that special when it comes down to reality.

Well done!!

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

bel1e
Senior Member

since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

6 posted 2012-04-25 07:53 PM

uh. just stumbling through your pathos....the first two kind of took my by surprise in the loveliest of ways...the third had me smiling in the way only you can make smile, icy~*~*~

XOXO

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

7 posted 2012-04-28 09:46 AM

Well done, my friend... I especially liked, "After", but enjoyed them all.

j.

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

8 posted 2012-04-29 09:57 AM

My dear poet friends
Replies all need individual attention, but right now my buisness is taking it all.
A cold spring means added worry--
When new weeds freeze, domestic plants are in trouble..need extra attention. Thats where mine is now focused.

Thank you all

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