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Wagon wheels |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa 
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Her wagon wheels have come off the tracks but there never were tracks, you know, just open and bare fields of despair and the wind that rustles through hair. But the wheels are off; she’s no fix-it man to repair what life’s put asunder and she stares at the pieces lost and alone wondering how to advance. She does need to get from here to there with her goods and chattels intact and she thinks to discard her backpack of past as a final tribute to something called love. She searches amongst the dense underbrush for a place where the sun cannot reach to dig a hole like an oversized grave to hold all her useless trinkets. But can she dig? Oh, no, no, no! She’s just an inept gypsy gal fooling herself and wasting her time in that dense underbrush. This she knows but she also knows well that one day she’ll stumble upon the light that grows greatness from ineptitude and burns her backpack to ash. And the ashes will blow with the wind far, far away, from the source so if your eyes sting it’s just that “something” time and intent set alight! Helen / 22 June 2013 |
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Gale Senior Member
since 2013-06-10
Posts 578Russia |
Thank you for sharing! It's reminded me of one song I know. There were such lines: "My house is built up, but I'm alone The door slammed behind..." |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thanks for the read, Gale. It's just the natural progression of things. Today always slams the door on yesterday but the mind (some minds) have trouble understanding the concept until "the light" if there such a thing be. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I've had the ashes engulf me many times during my lost decades, but somehow I always managed to spit them out and carry on. This poem gives the reader a sense of the need to carry on. As long as you keep surging toward that light you have a chance of dealing with fate. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
powerfully interesting and emotive 'write!' I, for one, certainly wouldn't have the ability to write this type of work even if I had half-past forever to try. |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
your poem and poetry seems to hit me in that spot of reminder that we are all helplessly human, but we have anchors as well if we are smart enough to use them |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Hi Jerry - Well, I guess that's it. Another's love is just like ash that we can so easily "spit out" and carry on with perhaps not much appreciation for what it actually was. At some time or other we're all guilty of that in the growing up process so at the end of the day so very much to slam the door on. Bruce - Thank you. As much as we are all the same we're still different so perhaps to stand firm in who and how we are and too our own writing styles is a good thing. Someone once tried to change my story telling into poetry but it didn't work. We are who we are and we write as we do - and I for one like how you write. Thank you, Emma. Yes, many anchors and thankfully we do have the ability to choose. Helen |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Your inspiration/methaphors are tied together so perfectly. Life is challenging at best but you seem to rise to the accasion every time. Enjoyed your thoughts Helen. Your last verse is spot on. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I didn't say what you said I said. You said, "Another's love is just like ash that we can so easily "spit out." What I said was . . . "I always managed to spit them out and carry on." I never anywhere in my comments said that it was easy. You made me sound like a hard-hearted man. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
The things we burden ourselves in life with can become entirely cumbersome, and lost love is definitely one of the hardest things to let go of that we hang on to for no good reason. Your eyes are looking forward, and the release you seek and/or fear is approaching. I think it will be a joyous thing for you to embrace once you're there. Michael |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thank you, Bluesy! I think I do sometimes "come of the tracks" with my stories but somewhere in the midst thereof is what I need to know. Jerry - I didn't mean for you to take my comment personally. I have in my lifetime been the cause of another having to burn their love to ash without much appreciation of the trauma involved. I now know better. The poem was perhaps just writing out what I've come to know. Please accept my apologies for inadvertently wording my comment in such a way as to make you think it was a personal attack. Far from it. Friends? Michael - Thanks for reading and for commenting. I'm getting pretty good at dismissing those cumbersome things one is inclined to carry around but admit to thinking about the times when I was "burdened". Lost love (if there such a thing be) in the grand scheme of things and energetically may hurt the one who turned away more than the "victim" (for lack of a better word) when that victim finally burns it to ash. I do appreciate the good intent of your comment but, hey, I'm okay.  Helen |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Friends? Of course. Never was anything other. I took your words a little too personally I guess. I, too apologize. 'Tis over. Done with. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Good! Thanks. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Kudos from another inept gyspy gal , Helen. Ida |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thanks, Ida, but don't forget that ... greatness awaits. |
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