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LorienLord
Member

since 2013-02-03

Posts 55
Wisconsin USA

0 posted 2013-04-30 07:14 AM

As the fog rolled across
the dark and silent moor
she raised the old knocker
on the weathered wooden door
but no answering footsteps
were heard crossing the floor
her heart stopped as she realized
he didn't live here anymore.

No echoes of laughter
filling rooms once so gay
and a well used red loveseat
covered in dust now turned gray
all the rooms were so empty
for there was nothing left to say
all the words had been used up
and that's why he went away.

Then she walked up to the library
where all his writing he kept
silently she read his words
and between each line she wept
as she sat in his old easy chair
where he wrote and sometimes slept
she dreamed of being at his side
this cruel fate she could not accept.

So will she live within the shadows
of the past that linger here
will she wander through each memory
that her heart still holds so dear
can she escape the loneliness
that now fills her soul with fear
and can she finally say goodbye
to one now so far and yet still so near.

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

1 posted 2013-04-30 09:48 AM

Lovely visuals LorienLord. I can feel the wistful longing in this piece. Much enjoyed.

Best wishes,
/Kit

Lighthousebob
Member Elite

since 2000-06-14

Posts 4725
California

2 posted 2013-05-02 04:26 PM

You're so good at taking your reader to that certain place wherever it might be. I felt like I was right there in that house going through all the motions with you. Enjoyed!

sanctus
New Member

since 2013-05-02

Posts 6
Canada

3 posted 2013-05-02 04:40 PM

Absolutely perfect flow. inspired imagery - very engaging

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

4 posted 2013-05-03 12:43 PM

Hauntingly beautiful, Lorien
ida

Sue_s
Junior Member

since 2013-03-26

Posts 45

5 posted 2013-05-03 02:16 PM

"all the words had been used up"

Dreams too I think. That would haunt anyone.

love,
me

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