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Michael

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0 posted 2012-11-17 08:43 AM

Starving Artist Syndrome

If I could paint the canvas of your mind
With the most beautiful image you could find,
I’d place you upon an ocean bluff;
Still that wouldn’t be near enough.

Violet flowers would deck the hillside,
Greeting the morning’s full moon tide;
Sun gently rising above sea…
Still that wouldn’t be all you’d see.

You’d see the path, and know it well,
Where passion starts – where daydreams dwell.
And you’d follow it on down,
Body caressed in silk white gown,

To textured sands of the shore
You could feel on your hands, and more.
Yet as waves rolled in, over feet,
The picture would still be incomplete.

You’d smell the fragrance of the air.
You’d feel the sea breeze in your hair,
And still the final touch would be
What I could never make you see.

No, there’ll never be a proper hue
To paint me standing next to you…
And what can I offer with word?
But the prettiest site you ever heard.

Though an artist I long to be,
Truth is I’m just a wannabe.

Michael Anderson

11-16-12

[This message has been edited by Michael (11-25-2012 10:58 AM).]

Victoria

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1 posted 2012-11-17 08:48 AM

I loved reading this. Beautiful words Michael. Enjoyed.

~V~

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
- Paul Valery (1871-1945)

JerryPat2
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2 posted 2012-11-17 09:15 AM

Beautiful wordsmithing, my friend. The artist in you didn't let you down as you painted this glorious view for her eyes to perceive.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

luminosity
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3 posted 2012-11-17 11:15 AM

oh absolutely beautiful....
a word artist you are

JamesMichael
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4 posted 2012-11-17 07:24 PM

Wonderful flow...James

Michael

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5 posted 2012-11-25 10:50 AM

Thank you all for the kind replies.

There is really no "her" this was written to, Jer, though I think the lady of this piece might be representing all women to me, subconsciously.

After reading your "beauty" poem I just thought I'd reach down and see if there was any thing I could, even remotely, see as beautiful left in me. A place I've never seen with a lady I've never met was the best I could come up with. The longing is real enough I suppose, if somewhat buried. Glad you enjoyed.

Michael

suthern

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6 posted 2012-12-14 12:29 PM

You definitely found beauty, my friend... this is exquisite!!!

ebonygirl
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7 posted 2012-12-23 03:20 AM

Michael,
Wow, the beauty you painted about an imagined
"her" deeply impressed me.
Ms. E

OwlSA
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8 posted 2012-12-23 09:14 AM

Michael, I love everything about this for SO many reasons, not the least being the path you are on with this, no matter that it is imagined - most magic is, but that doesn't detract from the beauty of magic, specific or general. The 3 lines I don't agree with, nor will anyone else, are the very last line and the first 2 lines of the secondlast stanza.

Owl

2islander2
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9 posted 2012-12-26 02:47 PM

very nice inspiration and great imagination, loved it,

yann

KJOTT
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10 posted 2012-12-26 10:32 PM

The poem is better without the self depreciation of the last two lines.

JL
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11 posted 2012-12-27 09:38 PM

"Though an artist I long to be,
Truth is I’m just a wannabe."

Excellent writing and artistic rendering,
and a touch of reality.

Enjoyed the read.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Honeybunch
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12 posted 2012-12-28 01:55 PM

Lovely, Michael. You found beauty within and projected it out into word.

Happy 2013!

Helen

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13 posted 2013-01-01 07:44 PM

Excellent writing, Michael. You are certainly not a wannabe poet.
Ida

jwesley
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Spring, Texas

14 posted 2013-01-03 12:54 PM

Being a wannabe is just fine as long as you keep seeking, my friend. Sixty-nine years and I still haven't stop (seeking, that is).

j.

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