french liaison to her childhood years

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Open Poetry #48

french liaison to her childhood years

Tomer
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since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

0 posted 2012-09-10 07:53 PM

She boarded a train to France
her eyes glancing down at her watch
waiting for it to exhale down the
canal where her grandma, Isabelle
use to listen to the jazz sea blues

She wore a white, cotton sweater
jet black heels to match her tight fit pants
As winter, like wine
bared its name in the ground
as the train traveled through the night

She wore her hair down
for the memories
of running through the plain-clothed streets
with her small, bare feet
sat well with her that night

The french of the said lips
where red met an underlying feel of
the rosemary tips of cemeteries
that buried her heart that night

That bare the French chateau
overlooking the canals
that spoke to the star lined night
and lay idle as the candles slowly
lost their wax to the moons rise.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

1 posted 2012-09-10 10:06 PM

A pleasure to read...James

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

2 posted 2012-09-11 12:19 PM

Thanks, James. Happy you enjoyed.

Cheers

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

3 posted 2012-09-11 02:02 AM

Another Tomer gem, each word, 'le mot juste' and not a brick out of place. Whilst you make the reader long to know more about her, a lot of the charm lies in the enigma. The description brings her to life in a perfect blend of present and past, and the last two stanzas are magical.

Owl

[This message has been edited by OwlSA (09-11-2012 04:04 AM).]

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

4 posted 2012-09-15 12:22 PM

Owl-

Happy you enjoyed - Especially the last 2 stanzas. You pretty much nailed what I was trying to do, as always. Take care.

Cheers

Tomer

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