Open Poetry #46 |
showbiz |
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
The parties were performances complete with stripper's pole. Oh-my-soul the audience were too polite to let us know that the goosebumps on their arms were not result of poignancy-- and all the clapping of the hands was not applause, but sheer relief that the torturous display of all we did and had to say was final--yea, innauseate -- drenched in sweat, they found land legs swaying under hot houselights to live to laugh another day oh-let's-write-another-play a villain is born every day as critics vote and have their say in reviews at three a.m. snide print upon the page... |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
c'mon k -- villians aren't born, they're made. nice, I like the evolution of your poetry, though subject matter seems fairly consistent. |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
What was,was. Enjoy the good times, forget the bad. This is what writing it out is for. Love, jo |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Christopher--is it uncanny or canny that you would show up now? (((((((((((relief))))))))) And yes, I am redundant indeed, but I keep writing from life, so why blame me? smile? I've been thinking about you much, as I finally kept my word and purchased Duma Key. You were right. That book is hitting my heart hard. RED I love you much, m'friend. And thank you, lovely Marty Jo, forever now a ...plumaisin in my crazy haid. *laughing* Thanks, both of you. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
as an afterthought / response: consistent does not necessarily equal redundancy. or, if it does, it doesn't necessarily mean others aren't maintaining interest. take, for example (not that I liken your poetry in any shape or form to this example) police procedural shows. there have had to be, what, about six gajillion episodes on tv for the past four decades, and still more come on out. if people like something, they tend to want more of it. so, in that case, consistency can be a good thing. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
*smile* I just really want to find a way to communicate, and if I've fone that, then? "Good." It's good. And no, I don't mean that the poetry is good, but the attempt was... STOP MAKING ME KARENOID. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Mama hen, clucking by... saying that it's all good! with nods to my delinquent son, for some of those who say you saw him when? |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Brian James Member
since 2005-06-26
Posts 147Winnipeg |
Is this meta-poetry? I had a really clever reply but I was worried it might be too rude. So I'm just going to give you the faithful nod that I get the joke, if there's a joke. How about a persuasive compliment? I really do like your poetry in general. This might be about something I'm not really familiar with, which would explain why my brain went straight to meta-poem. "They found land legs" is the best line as you know, big heavy words that they are, and given so much of their own room. Beautiful shift in tone. I also like how the poetry quite literally ends after the play is apparently over, and people long for the same old music again, "oh let's write another play" in the same old verse structure, and then the audience parts ways... the lovers of poetry continue to write, the critics are reduced from broad abstractions like "every day" until they're bland, unpoetic, unprofound (snide letters on a page at 3 am). I remember thinking that poetry really ought to be a subject matter that is suited to its manner of delivery, and that's something you have managed remarkably well here. Thank you for sharing it. "To me, the thing that art does for life is to clean it, to strip it to form." |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
As always, fantastic! It brings to mind, "The Tales of Hoffman." I love your way with words. Happy Spring, Rae |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Ah but ya'll are lovely. (Brian? I find your comments particularly intriguing--but if I start thinking I'll stop writing again. Your comments will be particularly helpful if I manage to get the next two poems off of the back burner.) I like to switch up styles, and I've been doing the story telling stuff too much lately to keep myself amused. Rae--your posts on my poems are always a welcome visit from a dear old friend. And um, Sunshine-Mom? Flirting with your son? *laughing* Seriously though, I have missed writing, such as it is. I have no delusions of greatness--but I do enjoy the process, so the time, consideration and encouragement from all of you are much appreciated. Love to all. |
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Sunshine
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I can't think of a safer flirtation... And it's still all good. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I know. He's just so cute y'wanna pinch his cheek! |
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