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Ghosts of Now |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! 
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Haunting words whisper at night Candles flicker in the dark Pictures, dancing, drift in light Magic weaves to hit its mark Dreaming dreams yet still to dream Leaving scars that grow less stark Mending pain in steel-strength seams Candles flicker in the dark Hard times meld with good and heal Magic weaves to hit its mark Pain weds love as proof we feel Leaving scars that grow less stark - Alison 1/1/10 [This message has been edited by Alison (01-03-2010 11:12 AM).] |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hello Alison, this is beautiful and fragile as the light of a candle, I like the subtle and delicate verses even if there is effective sadness in your poem....You really made an achievment here. happy new year yann |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"Dreaming dreams yet still to dream"~~ line speaks to me, Alison Nicely done M |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Alison - this writing is intriguing... BC |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
SAVED faster than you can say "Ghosts"!  I enjoyed every aspect of this poem! The message, the atmosphere, and your writing! VERY well done, m'dear!  Love 'n a BIG (((HUG))) Linda  www.lindadowd.com |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
Very beautiful writing Ali...I love seeing this side of you come out. Well done. Your humble servant. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
time heals all wounds, i am sure of that. Love does wonders for pain indeed. Love this, girl! Write on! |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
I don't recall the form of this poem, Alison, but it's so fitting for the circles of thought that grow like crystals in light...so very beautiful and fragile among the keepsakes of life that serve to strengthen the heart's vulnerabilities. I am touched by the sadness....  ~K |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"Dreaming dreams yet still to dream" ah yes... beautiful I see the pain is still with you I am sorry |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
This feels like Emily Dickenson, stoically truthful and well written.. Thank you. Goldenrose. Being deeply loved by someone gives you strength,while loving someone deeply gives you courage. Lao Tzu 6th century BC. |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Hard times meld with good and heal Magic weaves to hit its mark Pain weds love as proof we feel Leaving scars that grow less stark A lovely poem Alison and cleverly written, A most enjoyable post my dear, Love Lindsay |
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kindredspirit Member
since 2009-05-19
Posts 156 |
"Pain weds love as proof we feel Leaving scars that grow less stark" Very powerful. I read it twice. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...James |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I totally love this, and I love it more because it feels not finished, that non-finish "finish"--lends credence to your title.  Very nicely done, Alison! |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
that scheme is wicked, I REALLY REALLY really REALLY liked it. The poem is deep. Too deep for 2:06 am after the bar. Will read again. Paul Fall in love early, fall in love often. |
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N|D|N|C|Lost-Poet Member
since 2009-07-30
Posts 360New Orleans |
Thank you for your reply. Always impressed with your poems. Beautifully captured. |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
Haunting is the best adjective I can come up with at the moment, which is a testament to how well you wrote it, I imagine. Love the form, love your words. |
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Dadygoose Member
since 2010-01-01
Posts 162A Communist country |
Well Ali, I don't quite understand this one and get lost in the metaphors, but want to. But maybe it's that haven't read the whole series ... I want to feel what you felt when you wrote it? :-------) Hey, nobody's human! |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Alison, This has nice end rhymes. Love Bobby |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Great Poetry Lyrical and mystical I love the sound of it Your poetic talents grace these blue pages with superb writing Liz |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
quite interesting ... applause!! |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
So many to thank - here goes .... yann, Thank you for understanding the healing nature of this poem. It was the beginning of acceptance - we all grow as poets and this one is one of my chapters of growth - as a sister, woman and poet. xoxoxo Alison - Maureen, I am always happy when you read my poetry and find something that touches you. Thank you for letting me know. xoxox Alison - BC, Thank you. Emotions are intriguing to me. xoxoxo A - Linda ~ my friend and sister ~ Thank you so much for reading my poetry and understanding it as you do. I so appreciate your offers of friendship and sisterhood. You are a jewel in my life. Love, Alison - CG, Thank you. I am growing so who knows what you will see next - maybe my fangs  ... I really love that you read my poetry.xoxoxo A - Dixie, You are right - the wounds are healing and I am feeling more at peace with what has happened. You understand and I love you for that. xoxoxo Alison - Klassy-lady, I didn't really follow a form as much as work with what I have learned in the Poetry Workshop and made it work for this poem. I felt the repititon and needed to express that. Thank you so much for reading my poems. xoxoxo Alison - Kate, The pain is slowly moving on and I am feeling the urge to return to the beautiful world of words. Thank you, lovely one. xoxoxo Alison - Ah, Golden Rose, thank you for such a lovely compliment. I am so happy that you stopped by. xoxoxo Alison - Lindsay friend, Thank you for reading all my poems - the sad and happy ones. I always smile when I read your responses. You often make my day. xoxxo Alison - kindred spirit, I think that means you deserve two replies. Thank you for reading my poetry. xoxoxo A - kindred spirit, Thank you for taking the time to let me know that this poem touched you. xoxoxo Alison - James, Thank you. xoxoxo A - Karen, Thank you. Maybe it is unfinished because no relationship is truly "finished" - especially, the one between sisters. xoxoxo Alison - Paul, I really, really, REALLY thank you for reading and taking the time to let me know that you liked this poem. xoxoox Alison - Zach, Thank you for letting me know that you enjoy my poetry. What a wonderful thing to share with me. xoxoxo Alison - Kielo, Thank you for reading and appreicating my poems - the words and style. You make me happy. xoxoox Alison - Jaime, This wasn't a series. It is about healing from a falling out with a loved sister. We have not been able to find a way to forgive yet, but I am healing and hope that she is too. xoxoxo Alison - Bobby, Thank you. I went back and read it again after reading your comment. Thank you. xoxoxo Alison - Liz, Thank you. You made my day and week (even though the week has just started!). xoxoxo Alison - Bruce, Thank you. xoxoxo Alison |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Sometimes I'm a little slow with my reading... but this treasure is timeless. *S* Beautiful work! |
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