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when looking at the sea (haiku)
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when looking at the sea (haiku) |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
The abstract sea, Green as a field, Sparkle in its extremity Desires of the poet. |
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gilead Senior Member
since 2008-03-10
Posts 1067nevada, USA |
Such a beautiful haiku, yann; it lifts my heart, as if I were standing there on the shore, taking in the shimmering waves of that emerald sea! Regards -- Art |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
thanks Art for the warm comment, You guess right, I was at seashore this afternoon and the sea was green and sparkling on its left side. what a show... regards yann |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Wonderful, dear Yann. You have perceived it indeed as the field of infinite possibilities, a desire to explore the vastness of what is. Your poetic mind captured the beauty. Love, Margherita |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Yann, This is a nice little poem. However, it is not a 5-7-5 classical haiku. Bobby |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
I would have to agree. It is a spendid poem but it doesn`t follow the 5 - 7 - 5 pattern. |
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Nicole Victoria Junior Member
since 2010-01-22
Posts 24California, USA |
Beautiful. Simply beautiful. It speeks to me on a level of deep of pure passion |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thanks a lot margherita for the read and the very convincing and supportive comment regards yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Yo Bobby, thanks for the kind comment, I just named it haiku because it is a very short poem, i Know I didn't respect the rules because I don't know them... have a nice day yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thanks Earl for the read and supportive comment regards yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thank you very much Nicole for the splendid and so kind comment. regards yann |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Although, this short poem is not a 5-7-5 haiku, it is absolutely lovely!  Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Very nice Yann Stimulating without stressing the probing mind's eye. Eric |
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Billie Cullimore Member
since 2009-03-27
Posts 315 |
I do not know the sea, I am a mountain girl, but I can see it through your eyes. very nice. Billie Cullimore |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hello Honeybee, let's call that a short piece, a daiku for example (hi, hi), I appreciated your comment. regards yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
thanks for the clever comment Etholme.Enjoyed it. regards yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thanks a lot Billie, mountains are beautiful too and very inspiring, I appreciated your lovely comment. regards yann |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Maybe this is not a true Haiku, yann but it's very pretty poem. Ida |
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