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coastal catastrophe |
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naturegirl Member
since 2009-09-30
Posts 168England 
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Fair weather cumulous hang in cerulean skies, like flat bottomed sleighs gliding along some invisible conduit. Implicit, belying the roaring north wind, whipping whitecaps to smash mercilessly against collapsing figuline cliffs. Homes perched like roosting fowl clinging stoically, staking their claim to elevated existance, resisting the steady erosion of gardens, paths, bricks and mortar,taken piecemeal, like some delicacy, savoured and salivated over, revisited again, again, and again, until nothing recognisable remains. Their final resting place a spume strewn beach, broken, fractured, washed clean. The Sea. She plays her age old game of winner takes all. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Absolutely beautiful, naturegirl... I can see/feel the sea`s ancient, patient power all through your words.. what writing! . Best~ Amaryllis |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
This is great naturegirl. Had to look up "figuline," and was I surprised to find out its meaning. Very explicit verses and descriptive passages. Enjoyed much. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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Bastet Member
since 2010-05-07
Posts 246 |
A wonderful poem! It evolves almost like a Grrek play. I feel the tragedy from the beginning but enjoy the drama all the way through to the end. Great poetic style. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Absolutely great! It paints a realistic and vivid picture so real I can feel the wind and see the erosion unfolding. Very nice work! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
and her voice is the sigh of sirens.... enjoyed this view ms |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Fine writing. Great language, vivid images with brilliant word play.  "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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naturegirl Member
since 2009-09-30
Posts 168England |
Amaryllis, thank you it's a great compliment |
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naturegirl Member
since 2009-09-30
Posts 168England |
Jerry Pat, had to find another word you can have too much illiteration! |
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naturegirl Member
since 2009-09-30
Posts 168England |
DS, Yes the sea, she has me in her mesmerising grip |
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naturegirl Member
since 2009-09-30
Posts 168England |
Bastet & Prasad, Thank you for your kind words. Haven't read any greek tragedies but maybe I will x x x Balladeer Yes I can still feel that cold north wind 3 days later - Brrh! x x x |
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