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Basement Monsters
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Basement Monsters |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India 
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Basement Monsters Cracks vaguely fill from the center, Leading narrow unwelcoming steps, Pungent moisture grip the morbid basement, Fine rusting hesitantly moving away doors, Helplessly ignoring footsteps on old dust, Monstrous valiant lying idle center table, Clutches present those forgotten stains, Impious soundless hanging naïve hooks, Surgical knife capable of inflicting precise cuts, Thick head, no nonsense quiet large hammer, Observing closely silent scratches of screams, Struggling movements of innocent feet, Where the pretty moths are downright ugly, Motionless, emotionless, not longing anymore, No hate, no love, carefree, no illogical metaphors, Decaying fragrance dance to their distinct tunes. ©Prasad.N 4th Nov 2010. All rights reserved to Prasad.N |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
pras' this was a mortuary window to me..I can imagine it from the safety of the outside. chilling without beauty other than the calm. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
WoW! Quite an assortment of nasty and deadly mix of implements of personal destruction. Glum and despair spins throughout this offering. I get in to=hose moods myself quite frequently. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Eek! That is so scary! Very gothic, very creepy. Great writing skill! . Best~ Amaryllis |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
indeed quite the scene you paint with images here... very intense, indeed.... |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Thanks for taking time to comment Dark; I’ve been visiting a lot of them frequently this year. Appreciate it. Thanks for taking time to comment Jerry; you got it right. Appreciate it. Thanks for taking time to comment Amaryllis; it’s good to write down the darker side of life, sometimes. Appreciate it. Thanks for taking time to comment Cpat Hair; Appreciate your kind words. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Nicely done, Prasad! I can remember going down into the basement as a small boy, half-terrified of what monsters might be down there, waiting...creepy stuff!  |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Thank you Sir for your kind words. I’ve always been scared of going to the basement after darkness falls. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hello Prasad, striking atmosphere, a poem with powerful images that go to the heart...thanks for sharing a beautiful painting. regards yann |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Thanks a lot for your kind words Yann. Gothic painting it may be.  Appreciate it. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Beautifully dark. I really like your last stanza. Enjoyed this. -Trina. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
BOOOOO!!! Look out the claw is gonna get ya! Very cleverly done Prasad. Eric |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Well. I don't blame you for being scared, Prasad, This place would scare the hell out of me. Ida |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Thank you for taking time to comment and reading Trina. Glad you enjoyed the last stanza. Appreciate it.  Thank you for taking time to comment and reading Eric. Sure thing, I always try keeping away from creepy things however they get me most of the time. Appreciate it. Thank you for taking time to comment and reading Ida. It does help writing about things I get scared; the feeling that I am not alone helps. Appreciate it. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Thank you for taking time to comment and reading Trina. Glad you enjoyed the last stanza. Appreciate it. Thank you for taking time to comment and reading Eric. Sure thing, I always try keeping away from creepy things however they get me most of the time. Appreciate it. Thank you for taking time to comment and reading Ida. It does help writing about things I get scared; the feeling that I am not alone helps. Appreciate it. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
I don`t think I would like to be in a place where pretty moths were downright ugly, scattered about a surgical knife that made precise cuts. Ghoulishly goody! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...James |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Thank you for taking time to comment and reading, Earl. Me too, don’t like creepy places. Appreciate it. Thank you for taking time to comment and reading James. Appreciate it. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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